Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner.

Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter

• say how long you now want to rent the apartment for
• explain why your plans have changed
• tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Landlord,

I hope you are doing fine,

As we had signed an agreement to rent the property for 6 months, I wish to extend the contract due to unforeseen circumstances. Initially, my job had a 6-month contract, and now they are wiling to offer me a permanent position; therefore, I wish to extend it for 1 year.

The current job that I have been offered was my dream job and with that I believe I can bring revolutionary change in the field of health-care.

I wanted to address health concerning issue in the property since I have moved in among them is the biggest issue is of moulding. As you are aware that how harmful the moulding could be for your health and espcially for your lungs. I have tried to keep the room well ventilated and used certain agents to get rid of it. Despite, of that still this issue persist.

I would really appreciate your prompt response

Kind regards

Dr lolo path

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three required points: you request an extension, explain that your job has become permanent, and report a mould problem. The request is clear, and specifying an additional year gives the owner a definite proposal. Your explanation that the position is your “dream job” adds personal context, although the claim about bringing “revolutionary change” is broad and does not explain much about why you need to remain in this apartment. The mould issue is relevant and you mention steps you have taken, but the letter would be more complete if you asked the owner to arrange an inspection or repair and clarified where the mould is. These details would make the purpose and requested action more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The information follows a sensible order: you open with the extension request and its reason, then move to the apartment problem before closing politely. Paragraphing helps distinguish these two main topics, and linking words such as “therefore” and “Despite” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, some connections are awkward or unclear, particularly “I wanted to address health concerning issue … since I have moved in among them is the biggest issue,” which makes the transition into the complaint difficult to follow. The final request for a prompt response is also not tied to a specific action. Clearer topic sentences and more precise links between the mould, its health effects, and the action you want would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for the letter, including relevant terms such as “extend the contract,” “permanent position,” “well ventilated,” and “prompt response.” These choices communicate the main points, and there is some effort to use more formal language. However, several word choices, collocations, and spelling errors reduce precision: “moulding” should be “mould,” “health concerning issue” is unnatural, and “wiling” and “espcially” are misspelled. “Revolutionary change” also sounds overstated in this context. Aim for natural, specific phrasing—for example, describe “a persistent mould problem” and request “an inspection or treatment.” This would make the vocabulary more accurate and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a reason clause and a sentence joined with “therefore,” so the letter is not limited to basic structures. The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems make parts less controlled. For example, “As you are aware that how harmful the moulding could be” combines incompatible clause patterns; write “As you are aware, mould can be harmful.” The sentence beginning “I wanted to address” also lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “Despite, of that still this issue persist” has faulty punctuation and agreement. Review clause construction, subject–verb agreement, and comma use, especially in longer sentences.

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