Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods.

What are the reasons for this?

Is this a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Personages, in this world have started to understand the importance of locally produced goods rather than imported goods. I believe this is a bright moment and this essay will elucidate the reason of my slant that each and every individual should use locally produced goods.

Beginning with the chief aspect, "Make in India" which is a major national initiative launched by the Government of India to transform the country into a global design and manufacturing hub. Another crux in favour of it is the services for the locally produced goods or the product replacement becomes easy and quick compared to that of imported goods. Additionally, people have started to understand that imported goods are not worth the money and at times people are cheated with defective products on the basis of discounts.

A further delineation, can be locally produced googs will not only help the nation develop but will also help in bringing the economical stability world wide. It will motivate the people especially below poverty line to think innovative and start building and selling the products and eventually that will help them in their financial crisis. Supporting this with an illustration, recently due to auspicious occassion of Diwali we bought both the LED's produced in China that just lasted for 2 days and later stooped working due to some fault in it. So, we bough regular candles made by one of the local seller from the market and the satisfaction it gave us was incredible. It also bought happiness for that local seller's family.

After perusing the above discussion, I believe in the long run locally produced goods will be extremely used that will help individual and nation grow.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the question: you give reasons for choosing local goods, including easier product replacement and concerns about defective imports, and you clearly present the trend as positive. The “Make in India” reference and the Diwali example make the response relevant and personal. However, some ideas are more fully explained than others. The point about local purchasing helping people below the poverty line is asserted rather than showing how this would happen, and the example mainly illustrates product reliability and support for a seller rather than explaining the broader economic benefit. Develop each reason with a clearer cause-and-effect explanation and ensure the conclusion reflects the reasons discussed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The ideas generally progress from reasons for buying local goods to their possible benefits, and the Diwali example supports the second body paragraph. However, some links feel mechanical or unclear. Phrases such as “Beginning with the chief aspect,” “A further delineation,” and “After perusing the above discussion” draw attention to the transitions rather than guiding the reader naturally. The first body paragraph also combines a government initiative, after-sales service and distrust of imports without clearly showing how these points connect. Use simpler linking language and organise each paragraph around one main reason, with explanation and an example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “manufacturing hub,” “economical stability” and “financial crisis,” and the main ideas remain understandable. However, several less common expressions are inaccurate or unnatural in context, such as “Personages,” “bright moment,” “crux in favour of it” and “a further delineation.” There are also spelling errors, including “googs,” “occassion” and “stooped,” which reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Some phrases are unnecessarily elaborate where a direct expression would be clearer. Aim for precise, natural collocations rather than formal-sounding wording, and proofread spelling. For example, “local producers” and “after-sales service” would express your points more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “which is a major national initiative” and a contrast structure in “will not only help … but will also help.” Meaning is generally recoverable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems remain. For example, “Personages, in this world have started” has an unnecessary comma, while “the reason of my slant” uses an incorrect grammatical pattern. In “locally produced goods will be extremely used,” the passive construction does not express the intended meaning. The sentence beginning “A further delineation, can be…” also has an incorrect comma break and an awkward clause structure. Practise accurate clause construction, articles and verb patterns, and check punctuation in longer sentences.

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