Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods.

What are the reasons for this?

Is this a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Basically some consumers are choosing to buy goods that produced in their local rather than imported because of good quality and good quantity.In the local area the small shops sold our products in less amount and good quality.But on the other side the companies sold things in poor quality and increased price day by day. According to me this is positive trend, the small business men develop by this trend.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response is significantly under-length, containing only 70 words against the 250-word requirement. Consequently, the task is not fully addressed. While you identify reasons for buying local (quality) and express a position (positive trend), the ideas are extremely underdeveloped and lack the necessary support or examples required for a full essay. To improve, you must expand on your points by providing specific examples, explaining the economic or environmental impacts of local versus imported goods, and ensuring all parts of the prompt are explored in depth.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks paragraphing and logical structure. While there is a basic attempt to sequence ideas using 'But on the other side', the overall flow is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences, making the text feel like a collection of isolated statements rather than a cohesive argument. To improve, you should organize your response into an introduction, body paragraphs with clear topic sentences, and a conclusion, using linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'good quality' and 'good quantity' are used without precision, and 'small business men' is an imprecise term. There is no attempt to use less common or academic vocabulary. To improve, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to economics and consumer behavior, such as 'sustainability', 'supply chain', or 'economic growth', and avoid repeating simple adjectives like 'good'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains several grammatical errors that hinder clarity. For example, 'goods that produced' should be 'goods that are produced', and 'in less amount' is an incorrect collocation. The sentence structures are simple and lack variety. There are also issues with punctuation and word order. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically the use of passive voice and correct prepositional phrases, and ensure you are using complex sentence structures to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.

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