Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods.

What are the reasons for this?

Is this a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

many purchasers are increasingly choosing to purchase products that are made in their countryside than purchase of foreign goods. this could be the mindset of developing local production, and also believing in what you are knowledgeable off which they feel is better than foreign production whos knowledge is limited.

firstly, many folks choose to purchase home production owing to the view that when local products are increasingly purchased it will gradually improve the production and internal generated of a country. for example during the rein our former president Amadu Buhari , he made a policy that no rice should imported into the country that we should prioties our localily produced once

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 111 words. This significant under-length severely limits the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address the reasons for buying local goods, the second part of the prompt regarding whether this is a positive or negative trend is not addressed at all. The ideas provided, such as the mention of former President Buhari's policy, are underdeveloped and lack the necessary depth and structure required for a full task response. Consequently, the response is incomplete and does not adequately cover the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the paragraphing is insufficient. While there is a basic attempt at logical sequencing with the use of 'firstly', the overall progression of ideas is disjointed. The lack of cohesive devices makes the text feel like a collection of fragmented thoughts rather than a unified argument. The absence of a clear thesis statement or logical flow between the opening and the supporting example makes the text difficult to follow, resulting in a low score for coherence and cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'countryside' used to mean 'country' or 'nation', and 'internal generated' instead of 'internally generated'. The phrasing 'knowledgeable off' is incorrect, and the term 'localily' is a spelling error. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the errors in word formation and collocation occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'no rice should imported' (should be 'should be imported') and 'prioties our localily produced once' (should be 'prioritize our locally produced ones'). Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences and improper use of commas. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and the attempts at more complex sentences are marred by significant errors, which limits the range and accuracy of the writing.

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