Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods.

What are the reasons for this?

Is this a positive or a negative trend?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Most of people are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their common area, rather than some are interested in imported goods.

One the one hand , in over country most of people are choosing to buys products in their local areas such as clothes , shoes, sugar, tea, oil, paper are buying locally .They believed that this product are much cheaper as compare to imported and other reasons that these thing are reached fastest as compare to imported. For example most of people are buying clothes are in Pakistan. Moreover .It is much cheaper as compare the imported clothes and rent of this clothes are very low as compare to imported clothes and reached fastest in all over the country.

On the other hand, few people are choosing to buy products for other countries such as England Canada and India . These people are buy different things in these countries such as clothes and basic need of life such as tea, beans and oil these are very expensive but the quality is very best . For example some people are imported shoes is different countries and sale in Pakistan , the quality of these shoes are very fine and clean but the price is very high as compare the shoes of Pakistan and the rent of this luggage is very high .

I think that it is positive trend to good products are imported in different countries . It is very beneficial for country

All and all, most people are choosing to buys products locally such as oil tea and paper as the result it is much cheaper and ratio of rent is very low and other are buying products imported such as clothes and shoes , as the result they produced good and fine quality things.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both questions by giving reasons for choosing local goods—lower prices and faster availability—and by stating that you see the trend as positive. The examples of locally bought clothes and imported shoes also relate to the topic. However, the position is not consistently clear: the sentence “I think that it is positive trend to good products are imported” appears to support importing, rather than explain why buying locally is positive. The response also gives limited development of the reasons and does not clearly explain the benefits or drawbacks of the overall trend. Clarify your position and extend each main reason with a specific explanation or example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure, with separate sections for local goods, imported goods, your opinion and a conclusion. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “For example” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the contrast between local and imported goods is not clearly connected to the question, and the opinion paragraph is very brief. Several ideas are repeated, especially that local goods are cheaper and imported goods have better quality. Some transitions are also used mechanically or inaccurately, such as “All and all.” Organise the response around the two task questions, and use clearer references and links between each reason and your overall view.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “imported goods,” “quality,” “locally,” and “basic need of life,” so the reader can identify the subject of your examples. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “as compare to,” “very high,” and “very cheaper.” Some word choices or combinations are unclear or unnatural, such as “common area,” “rent of this clothes,” and “these thing are reached fastest.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to understand. Build a more precise range for discussing price, availability and product quality, and check that words combine naturally—for example, use “transport costs” rather than “rent” when describing the cost of moving goods.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt longer sentences and use basic contrast and reason structures, including “On the other hand” and clauses introduced by “as the result.” However, sentence structures are limited, and errors occur frequently in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries. Examples include “most of people,” “choosing to buys,” “They believed that this product are,” and “some people are imported shoes.” These patterns can make relationships between ideas hard to follow. Punctuation and spacing are also inconsistent, with commas separating lists and full stops sometimes placed awkwardly. Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses; check subject–verb agreement and verb forms in each sentence.

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