Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir

I hope you are doing well. My name is Tajinder Singh working in deburing department ,employee id ([redacted phone]) in century plant. I am wrinting this letter as i saw a job posting for cnc machinist for our plant.I completded my study in mechnical techinician cad/cam.Its been 2 years in same department as i learnt a lot of things such as standard of products as well as precision of products.

Furthermore when i join the company i wished that one day i will work as a cnc machinist and after 4 yaers of experience i will apply for red seal certifictaion too. I do not want to leave this company because in this aerospace company i learnt a lot of thingns and want to learn more. i will wait for yours positive reply .

yours faithfully

Tajinder Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the purpose of the letter by referring to the CNC machinist vacancy and explain that you have worked in your current department for two years, learning about product standards and precision. You also give a reason for staying with the company: you value what you have learned in its aerospace setting. However, the request to explain how the company would benefit from transferring you is not answered, and your career-development goal is only briefly stated rather than supported. The letter also falls 11 words short of the required minimum, leaving little room to develop these points. Add specific transferable skills and explain how your training and experience would help the new department and the company.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The ideas are presented in a generally understandable order: you introduce yourself and the vacancy, describe what you have learned, then mention your career plans and wish to remain with the company. Basic linking phrases such as “Furthermore” help signal a new point. However, the response is largely one paragraph, so the separate task points are not clearly organised, and the progression from your current experience to the company’s benefit is missing. Some connections are abrupt, particularly the move from learning about product standards to your future certification. Use short paragraphs for your experience, the proposed transfer and your reasons for staying, and connect each point explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant workplace vocabulary, including “department,” “CNC machinist,” “precision,” “aerospace” and “certification,” which makes the general subject clear. However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make the letter less polished, such as “deburing,” “wrinting,” “mechnical techinician” and “thingns.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, including “standard of products” and “positive reply.” Choose accurate terms such as “product standards” and “favourable response,” and proofread technical vocabulary carefully. More precise language for transferable skills and contribution would also help explain your suitability for the new role.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The letter communicates its main points using mostly simple sentence patterns, with an attempt at a longer structure in “because in this aerospace company I learnt a lot…”. However, the range is limited, and errors in sentence construction and punctuation occur throughout. For example, “My name is Tajinder Singh working in…” is not a complete, well-formed introduction, while “Its been 2 years in same department as i learnt…” has problems with the opening construction, article use and sentence boundaries. Capitalisation of “I” and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise complete sentences and accurate past and present forms, then check articles, commas and full stops so the reader can follow each point smoothly.

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