Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I have worked for two years in your company. I have learned different new skills such as, communication and how to deal with customers. When started I was very nervous and lack of confidence. However, now I easily communicate without stress and anxiety.

In addition, you can opened new baranch and require experience manager. I would like to request you to transfer my new baranch as a manager because, I am experience employee and I have knowledge how to deal with others customers. This transfer help me to better future and assist me to improve my quality of life.

On the other hand, I cannot wish to transfer my different company. I have made many new friends in this baranch. However, boss need a manager for a new baranch. I have opprtunity to grow my career and build a better future and improve my living standards. I look forward to hearing you.

Yours faithfully,

Habib

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three requested points: you mention learning communication and customer-service skills, request a move to a new branch, and explain that you want to remain with the company because you have made friends there. The purpose is generally understandable, but the reasons for the transfer are not fully developed. For example, you say the company needs an experienced manager and that you have relevant knowledge, but you could explain more specifically how your experience would help the new branch succeed. Your reason for staying is also mixed with the career benefits of moving, so make clear that you value the company itself and want to continue contributing to it. A more direct, consistently formal request would strengthen the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable structure, with an opening, paragraphs about your experience and transfer request, and a closing. The sequence broadly follows the task, and phrases such as “In addition” and “On the other hand” attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is not always clear: the final paragraph shifts between not wanting to leave, having friends at the branch, and wanting career growth without clearly linking these points. “On the other hand” does not express the relationship between the ideas that follow. Organise each paragraph around one purpose and use transitions that show the intended connection. A clearer closing sentence that restates your request would also help the letter feel complete.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough relevant vocabulary to communicate the main message, including “communication,” “customers,” “transfer,” and “career.” However, the range is limited, and several noticeable spelling and word-choice or collocation errors make parts less natural, such as “baranch,” “opprtunity,” “experience employee,” and “different new skills.” Some phrases are also imprecise: “I cannot wish to transfer my different company” does not clearly express that you do not want to leave this company. Choose accurate workplace expressions and check spelling carefully. For example, “experienced employee,” “new branch,” and “I would prefer to remain with the company” would convey your meaning more clearly and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences use simple structures, and the reader can usually understand your main points. There are frequent errors in verb forms, articles, and sentence construction, however, and attempts at longer sentences are often faulty. Examples include “When started I was very nervous,” “you can opened new baranch,” and “This transfer help me.” These need forms such as “When I started,” “you can open a new branch,” and “This transfer would help me.” The sentence beginning “I cannot wish to transfer…” is also grammatically unclear. Practise building accurate sentences with a subject and correctly formed verb, then add reasons using clauses such as “because” or “which would.” This will improve clarity while allowing more variety.

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