Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to express my gratitude to be a part of Adept infotech as quality assurance in tech department for past two years. However, I am aware about the new developer position that I am interested in.

In a past two years, I have learned numerous skills that I was unaware when I started. But, with the assistance of experianced managment I have possess leadership skills as well as coding in HTML and Python. In the meantime I have completed a diploma on website managment as well.

By moving to new department, it is not only advancement for me only, but also our organization can also benefit. As I am an experianced employee, I have alredy gained knowledge on company policies and working procedures which can takes weeks for a new employee. Also, Company has to spend tons of money on the training of new employee. Instead, I have alredy learned the Abc's of the new position so I am an ideal suggestion.

Lastly, I wish to stay in this company as this was my first job when i started and I have learned more from here than to anyother places. Honestly, I see my career advancement in this organization.

Thank you for your consideration.

Yours faithfully,

David Jones

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three requested points and maintains a clear, appropriate purpose: you describe skills gained, explain the company’s potential savings from transferring you, and state why you want to remain. The examples of leadership, HTML and Python skills, and a website-management diploma make the learning point relevant. Your explanation of the company’s benefit is also persuasive, particularly the time and training costs a new employee would require. However, the claim that you have already learned the “ABC’s” of the new position is not fully explained, and your reason for staying relies mainly on it being your first job and on general career prospects. To strengthen the response further, develop these points with more specific links to the role and your commitment to the company.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The information is organised in a clear sequence: the opening states your request, the following paragraphs cover your learning and the company’s benefit, and the final paragraph explains your wish to stay. Paragraphing helps the reader follow the three parts of the task, while transitions such as “However,” “By moving to new department,” and “Lastly” signal changes in focus. The overall progression is easy to understand. Some linking is slightly mechanical, and “In the meantime” does not clearly express the relationship between your work experience and completing the diploma. The opening could also state the transfer request more directly. Use transitions that show the precise connection between ideas, and make references such as “the new position” explicit so the progression feels more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of relevant workplace vocabulary, including “quality assurance,” “leadership skills,” “working procedures,” and “career advancement,” which helps communicate the purpose of the letter. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “training” and “company policies.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “experianced,” “managment,” and “alredy” are misspelled, while “ideal suggestion” is not a natural way to describe yourself as a candidate. “Tons of money” is also too informal for a letter to a manager. Aim for accurate spelling and professional collocations, and choose vocabulary that expresses your qualifications and the company’s savings precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response includes both simple statements and attempts at more complex structures, for example, “By moving to new department, it is not only advancement for me only, but also our organization can also benefit.” This shows an effort to connect and compare ideas, and the intended meaning is generally understandable. However, some sentence structures and verb forms are inaccurate. In “I have possess leadership skills,” use the past participle “possessed” or recast the sentence; “which can takes weeks” should use “take.” Articles and sentence construction also need attention in phrases such as “to new department” and “as quality assurance in tech department.” Review agreement, verb forms, and article use, then check complex sentences for balanced, parallel phrasing.

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