Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sarah,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to express my interest in applying for the General Manager role as I believe it is time for me to get an upgradation in my career.

I have already learned a lot about the company while working here as a warehouse manager for the past two years. I have a clear idea about all the employees who work for us and have built a good professional relation with all of them. Moreover, I am very much aware of both and manufacuring as well as warehouse process.

Therefore, I believe I am a great fit for this role, promoting me will help the company to narrow down its difficulty that we currently face in planning and scheduling for the production. In addition, my knowledge in SAP will make things more organized in the facility.

I wish to stay with the company till I retire because I feel like our company is my second home. This is where I have learned all aspects of running a business successfully and my level of commitment would remain as same as what you are experiencing now. Thank you for taking time to consider my application and I would like discuss furthermore about my experience if you also feel that I am a good pick for the role.

Yours faithfully,

Gokul

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The letter addresses the three requested points: you describe learning about the company and its processes, explain how your SAP knowledge could improve planning and organisation, and give a clear reason for wanting to remain with the company. The purpose—seeking a move—is also apparent. However, the request is framed as applying for a “General Manager role,” rather than clearly asking to transfer to a different department, so the proposed move is not fully aligned with the task. Some support is also broad: “I have learned all aspects of running a business successfully” is not illustrated with specific examples. Clarify the department or role you seek and develop the benefits with one or two concrete examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening request, a paragraph about your experience, one about the company’s potential benefit, and a closing explanation of your commitment. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Therefore,” and “In addition” help show how the points relate, and the reader can follow the main progression. To make the organisation more polished, ensure each paragraph develops one point without abrupt shifts. For example, the move from your knowledge of employees and processes to the company’s scheduling difficulties could be connected more explicitly. The final paragraph combines your reason for staying, your commitment, thanks, and a request to discuss the application; separating or more clearly sequencing these closing functions would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of workplace vocabulary, including “warehouse manager,” “planning and scheduling,” “production,” “SAP,” and “commitment.” These terms make the context clear and show an attempt to be specific. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “upgradation” is not the natural expression here, “professional relation” should be expressed differently, and “a good pick for the role” is too informal for a letter to a manager. There is also a spelling error in “manufacuring.” Aim for natural collocations and a consistently professional register, especially when describing your suitability and the company’s operational needs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the conditional structure “promoting me will help the company…” and the reason clause “because I feel like our company is my second home.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. In “I am very much aware of both and manufacuring as well as warehouse process,” the structure is incomplete and the noun phrase lacks clear grammatical form. “I would like discuss” needs an infinitive marker, and “my level of commitment would remain as same” has an incorrect comparative construction. Review parallel phrasing, articles and infinitive patterns, and proofread longer sentences so that complex ideas remain controlled.

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