Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I'm writing this letter for department switch, moreover a promotion.

In this company, I've learned how to manage multiple accounts, creating weekly uploading calendar for numerous accounts, managing P/L (profit & loss) via ads spending.

My promotion is on hold since two years, although I've given my five years to this company very sincere and honestly and I believe company should trust on me with all my developed skills to take this company at one more advance step. As a senior account manager, I've got myself trained in creatives and ads marketing and I'm moreover capable to take over this associate creative director position opening in this company. My creative skills can shine on billboards if I get this opportunity.

Therefor, I never want to die down, either i get this position or not. This company has trained my and i want it to do more for this company without being fearless of quitting from company.

I'll won't let anyone down, seeking for this opportunity since a long time. I would really appreciate if you would consider me for this opening.

Your faithfully

Sohaib.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose by requesting a move and promotion, and you give relevant evidence of what you have learned, including managing accounts, planning upload calendars and handling advertising budgets. You also explain that you want to remain with the company because it has trained you and you wish to contribute further. However, the request is not always clear: “My promotion is on hold since two years” does not explain whether you are asking specifically to transfer departments, and the benefit to the company is asserted rather than developed. Explain how your account-management and creative-marketing experience would help the new department, and state your request directly and consistently. This would make the position and all three task points more fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a basic structure, with an opening request, a paragraph about your experience and proposed role, and a closing appeal. The ideas are generally relevant, but progression is uneven: the discussion moves from a department switch to a promotion, then to a creative director vacancy, without clearly connecting these requests. Linking phrases such as “moreover,” “although” and “therefore” are sometimes used in ways that do not show the intended relationship between ideas. The paragraph about staying with the company also contains several points that are difficult to follow together. Organise the letter around the three requested points and use clear transitions to show how your experience supports the transfer and benefits the company.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant workplace vocabulary, including “multiple accounts,” “P/L,” “ads marketing” and “associate creative director,” which helps communicate your experience and ambitions. There is also an attempt to use less common expressions, such as “my creative skills can shine on billboards.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “for department switch,” “take this company at one more advance step” and “die down.” “Fearless of quitting” also does not clearly express your intention to stay. Choose conventional professional phrases and use them precisely; for example, describe the skills you can “bring to the department” and how they could “support its objectives.” This would make your meaning more consistently clear and appropriate for a formal letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a sentence beginning “although” and a conditional request in “if I get this opportunity.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the letter difficult to interpret. Examples include “I've given my five years,” “company should trust on me,” “This company has trained my,” and “I'll won't let anyone down.” There are also problems with verb forms and sentence construction in “creating weekly uploading calendar” and “Therefor, I never want to die down.” Practise forming complete, accurate sentences and checking verb forms, pronouns, articles and agreement. A careful edit would help your ideas come across more reliably.

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