Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter to express my gratitude regarding the opportunity as administrative and accountant assistant. I have learnt all the documentation work as well as practical approach of accounting terms as journal entries, trial balance, receivables and payables and Balance Sheet. This learning has made my horizons broader and I am willing to move to another department.

I want to take a new step in my career as Warehouse Team Lead in our company. This role is important for me in two ways - Personally as well as Professionaly. This role gives me better understanding of our products in terms of steel coil, Hot rolled and cold rolled. Galanized and galvalume products. It will help in understanding direct client relationship and better approch with machines and tools. Till now I have all the knowledge in terms of theory and my new rolw will help the company to grow as I will be aware of office and admin work and Warehouse inventory.

The company is best not only in terms of making revenue but also the companies donation ranks amongst 10 in city. The company have many senior managers who had all started with my role as begginer and fresher. Company idea of giving opportunity to enthusastic is the best approach. So as an individual I will always loyal to company and it policy in regards of value and ethics.

Yours faithfully,

Erick

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you describe learning accounting and documentation, propose a move to Warehouse Team Lead, and explain your loyalty to the company. The proposed transfer is relevant, and linking your administrative knowledge with warehouse inventory gives a useful reason the company could benefit. However, the benefit is not fully developed: explain more specifically how your combined skills would improve stock control, coordination, or service. Your reasons for staying focus mainly on the company’s reputation and values, rather than clearly stating why you personally prefer to continue your career there. The letter’s purpose is clear, but fuller support for these points would make the response more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: it moves from your current experience to the proposed role and then to your reasons for remaining with the company. Paragraphing helps the reader identify these stages, and links such as “This role” and “Till now” connect related ideas. Some connections are less clear or feel mechanical, however. For example, “This role is important for me in two ways” promises two points, but the following explanation does not clearly separate them. The final paragraph also shifts from the company’s donations to senior managers’ career paths and then to your loyalty without explaining the links. Make each paragraph’s main point explicit and use transitions to show how each reason supports your request.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for the topic, including specific terms such as “journal entries,” “trial balance,” “receivables and payables,” and “Warehouse inventory.” These details make your experience and proposed department clear, and phrases such as “direct client relationship” show an attempt to use more formal workplace language. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, including “express my gratitude regarding the opportunity,” “broader horizons,” and “better approch with machines and tools.” Spelling errors such as “Professionaly,” “begginer,” and “enthusastic” also reduce accuracy. Aim for natural, precise workplace expressions and proofread spelling; for example, describe how your skills would “support warehouse operations” rather than using unclear phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the message remains understandable. The sentence beginning “It will help in understanding…” shows an effort to explain a consequence, while the final paragraph uses several connected ideas. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, agreement, and sentence construction. For example, “The company have many senior managers” should use a singular verb, and “as administrative and accountant assistant” needs a clearer article and noun structure. The fragment-like product list after “steel coil” also interrupts the sentence, while “I will always loyal” is missing a verb. Review agreement and complete sentence structure, then check each sentence for a required verb and article.

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