Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I hope you are doing great. I am writing a letter to express my interest to get promoted to the next level position.

As you know that, I am working as a team leader in the sales department. I have learned several skills during my current position like good communication, problem solving and time management skills. Moreover, I have learn how to manage the team as a good leadership.

I have those skills and qualities which would help the company growth and productivity. I am wondering if you consider my application to promoted to the Assistant Manager in the sales department.

I do not want to quiet the company because of its good will and growth in the market. I would be grateful if I got the opportunity to serve as a Assistant Manager in your company. I am ready to prove myself and invest my all skills in the better development of the company. I would appreciate if you look into my application. Looking for positive response from your side.

Your sincerely,

Lovepreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses all three bullet points, but it fails to follow the specific instructions of the prompt. The task asks you to request a move to a 'different department,' but you have instead written a letter requesting a 'promotion' within your current department. This is a significant misinterpretation of the task requirements. While you mention skills learned and your desire to stay with the company, the core purpose of the letter is misaligned with the prompt. To improve, ensure you carefully read the instructions to identify the specific action required (transfer vs. promotion).

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, and the progression of ideas is generally clear. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'I have,' which help the flow. However, the paragraphing is somewhat disjointed, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs could be smoother. The use of referencing is occasionally repetitive, which makes the writing feel a bit mechanical. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects back to the main purpose of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You use basic terms like 'good communication' and 'good leadership,' which are repetitive. There are also some errors in word choice, such as 'quiet' instead of 'quit' and 'good will' instead of 'reputation' or 'positive work environment.' While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited to common, everyday language. To improve, focus on using more precise professional terminology and avoid repeating simple adjectives like 'good' throughout your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You have several grammatical errors, such as 'I have learn' (should be 'I have learned'), 'as a good leadership' (should be 'as a leader'), and 'invest my all skills' (should be 'invest all my skills'). Additionally, there are minor punctuation and article errors, such as 'a Assistant Manager.' While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to distract the reader. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will help improve your score.

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