Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Melody,

I hope you are doing well. It's been wonderful experience of working here under the administration department. I have gained advance knowledge about the admin department work. Thank you for giving this opportunity. I already spend two years working under admin department, now I would like to work under finance department. Therefore, I would like to request you to transfer me under the finance department.

I have broad knowledge and skills related finance, as I already completed Bachelors of commerce in the Accounting field. I also have completed International Business Management course from St. Clair college which has accounting, taxation subject included. As you know that admin and finance both departments needs good communication, organization, co-operative skills and I have these experience as I worked in the admin in this company and I also worked in finance in India. I can assure you that if i get transfer in the finance department, I would be asset for this department. I have knowledge of accounting system of the sage software our company using as well the taxation system our company has. I am familiar with our nation's members while working in finance so I can contact them on tax season and I'm sure they will trust me for doing the taxes behalf of them.

I don't want to quit this company as I have a wonderful experience here and I always appreciated of the work I do for this company. It is also very close to my house so It can save reasonable time for me. I have learned many things here and I want to learn many more things in the future. Therefore, I appreciate if you consider my request.

Hoping prompt response from your side.

Yours faithfully,

Varsha Rathod

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

The letter covers all three bullet points: it mentions what was learned in the current role, suggests how the company would benefit from the transfer, and explains why the writer wishes to stay. The tone is appropriate for a formal business request. However, some ideas are slightly repetitive, and the explanation regarding the 'taxation system' and 'members' is a bit vague and could be more clearly articulated to demonstrate professional value. Overall, the task requirements are fully addressed with a clear purpose throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a specific purpose. The progression of ideas is generally smooth. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly repetitive (e.g., 'I also', 'Therefore'). While the paragraphing is appropriate, the transition between the skills mentioned and the specific benefit to the company could be more fluid. Referencing is generally clear, though some sentences feel slightly disjointed due to minor grammatical issues that affect the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to express their intentions clearly. There are attempts to use professional terminology such as 'administration department', 'accounting field', and 'taxation system'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'advance knowledge' (should be 'advanced'), 'I already spend' (should be 'have spent'), and 'on tax season' (should be 'during'). These errors do not impede communication but indicate a need for more precise control over professional collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses ('I already spend', 'both departments needs') and articles ('the finance department'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are minor errors in sentence construction. While the meaning is always clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. The writer demonstrates an ability to construct complex sentences, but accuracy remains inconsistent.

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