Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear SIr/ Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to request to move to a different in the same company for my carrer development.

Firstly, I would like explain that I a have learned alot of things from my first job such as, teamwrok, reliable ,punctual and help each others which will helps me for my future job. Secondly, I would like to mention that the company would be beneficial from moving me to a different department as I am confident to do teamwork, giving meningful ideas for company development which will help for organization development. Lastly, I want to explain that I do not want to leave the company as now it is a part of my life and my responsibility to work for my company for more development and sccusse. Moreover, all staff is very kindhearted and kind.

I look forward to hear from you soon.

Best regards,

Manpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt: skills learned, benefits to the company, and reasons for staying. However, the development of these ideas is quite basic. For instance, the explanation of what you learned ('teamwork, reliable, punctual') is a list of adjectives rather than a description of professional competencies. Similarly, the benefits to the company are stated in very general terms ('meaningful ideas'). To improve, you should provide more specific examples of your contributions or the specific skills you wish to apply in a new department to demonstrate a more professional tone.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You have used basic cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Lastly' to sequence your points. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing is slightly disjointed. The transition between the reasons for staying and the compliment to the staff is abrupt. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects smoothly to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There are several spelling errors, such as 'carrer' (career), 'alot' (a lot), 'meningful' (meaningful), and 'sccusse' (success). Additionally, some word choices are awkward, such as 'the company would be beneficial from moving me', which should be 'the company would benefit from my transfer'. To improve, focus on using more professional collocations and proofreading for common spelling mistakes. Expanding your range of verbs and adjectives will help you express your professional goals more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The letter contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. Examples include 'I would like explain' (missing 'to'), 'help each others' (should be 'each other'), and 'all staff is very kindhearted' (should be 'all the staff are'). The sentence structure is often repetitive, relying heavily on 'I would like to'. To improve, work on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentence constructions are grammatically sound. Increasing the variety of your sentence structures will also help improve your score.

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