Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Andrew,

I hope you are doing well.

I am writing to show my interest in moving to a different department as I will be completing 2 years in my current position and have learnt a lot since the time I have joined the company. Currently, I am working in the testing team of the company where I have learn how to test different codes by doing manual testing or automation testing. Along with that, I have also learnt team management and leadership skills. Moreover, I have also been attending school for learning programming languages like Java, JavaScript, Python.

I recently came to know about a recent job opening in the software development department at our company and I would be more than interested in taking up that role. This will also benefit company in a very good manner as I already have the skills for testing and if company moves me to a software development role than I would be able to do my part of job with more confidence. Furthermore, I don't wish to leave this company as this company has given me chance as a fresher and believed in me when I had minimum knowledge.

It would be my humble request to please consider me for the new opening. Thanks for your time and consideration.

Regards,

Jevin

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly outlined your current learning, explained the benefits of your transfer to the company, and provided a sincere reason for wanting to stay. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. To improve, you could expand slightly on the specific 'benefits' to the company; while you mention your testing skills, explaining how these would specifically enhance the development team's workflow would make your argument more persuasive and fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter follows a logical structure with clear paragraphing. You use transition signals such as 'Currently,' 'Along with that,' 'Moreover,' and 'Furthermore' to connect your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The progression of ideas is easy to follow, and the purpose of the letter is clear from the opening paragraph. To reach a higher band, try to vary your cohesive devices and ensure that the flow between sentences feels more natural rather than relying on a list-like structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'automation testing,' 'leadership skills,' and 'programming languages.' However, there are some instances of slightly unnatural phrasing, such as 'benefit company in a very good manner' and 'do my part of job.' These minor inaccuracies do not impede communication but prevent the vocabulary from being considered 'flexible' or 'precise.' Focusing on more natural collocations and professional business terminology will help elevate your score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I have learn' (should be 'learned'), 'if company moves me' (missing article 'the'), and 'than I would be able' (should be 'then'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not cause confusion for the reader. To improve, pay closer attention to verb tenses and the use of articles. Increasing your control over complex sentence structures while reducing these minor slips will lead to a higher band score.

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