Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. As a part of your company, I am writing this letter in regards to change the department for improving myself. I have learned a lot from my current position. However, I feel that I need to upgrade myself and want to learn a bunch of new things. Moreover, your company taught me not only good communication but also taught how to handle the situation in busy time. I am very grateful for that.

Furthermore, I believe that If I move to the different department, It will give me more knowledge about other part and also I am able to see the different side of the company. In case of busy schedule, I can handle the whole situation by myself If I know each and every part of the company.

As this company provides me anything that I want for my improvement, I do not wish to leave the company. Besides that I am working with very friendly team and I would love to work with them. They tend to support me very well in every hard time and I am grateful that I have a chance to do a team work which is my favorite thing.

Thank for your time and giving me this opportunity.

Kind regards,

Yesha Sharma

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You mentioned what you learned, suggested how the company would benefit from your move, and explained your desire to stay. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, when explaining the company's benefit, you state you will gain knowledge, but you could have been more specific about how this cross-departmental experience would add value to the firm's operations. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager, and the purpose is clear throughout the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific requirement of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'However' to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by slightly mechanical transitions. The referencing is generally clear, though some sentences, such as 'In case of busy schedule, I can handle the whole situation by myself', feel slightly disconnected from the previous point. Overall, the progression of ideas is easy to follow, and the paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different sections of your request.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use some relevant business-related terms like 'career development', 'position', and 'department'. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'upgrade myself' and 'learn a bunch of new things' are a bit informal or imprecise for a professional letter. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise collocations and a wider variety of professional vocabulary to demonstrate a more sophisticated control of the language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While your meaning is always clear, there are frequent minor errors in grammar and punctuation. For instance, 'in regards to change the department' should be 'in regard to changing departments', and there are inconsistent capitalizations, such as 'If I move to the different department, It will...'. Additionally, some articles are missing or misused (e.g., 'do a team work'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score in this criterion.

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