Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to request an alteration in my career prospects.

I have been working as a line leader in Easy plastic corporation for last two years. I am really gratitude because i learnt numerous skills such as team work, technical and emotional skills. I have been proficient to complete the task with limited time as before the ordered required by company.

I came to know that you are looking for employee for quality checker position as i know all the responsibilities of this domain . I would appreciate if you could move my position to Quality control department . My career evolution not only beneficial for me but also company does not need provide training because i did part time job in same field. I do not want to exit this organization because this place give me everything which i need to stand in this country as well as health related benefits .

I am eagerly waiting for your response.

Yours sincerely,

Gurpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt: it mentions skills learned, explains the benefits of the move to the company, and clarifies why the writer wishes to stay. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of benefits is slightly repetitive, and the tone is occasionally inconsistent with a formal business letter (e.g., 'I am really gratitude'). While the purpose is clear, the response would benefit from more professional elaboration on how the specific skills acquired in the current role would translate to the new department. Overall, it addresses the task requirements adequately but lacks the depth expected for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices, though some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'I came to know that' and 'My career evolution not only beneficial for me but also'. The use of referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be smoother. Paragraphing is present, but the structure within the paragraphs is somewhat basic. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of incorrect word choice or word form, such as 'I am really gratitude' (should be 'grateful') and 'ordered required' (unclear meaning). The phrase 'career evolution' is slightly unnatural in this context. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'quality checker' and 'domain', the overall range is limited. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more accurate collocations and ensuring that word forms (nouns vs. adjectives) are used correctly in professional contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'I have been proficient to complete' (should be 'able to complete') and 'this place give me' (subject-verb agreement error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces before commas and incorrect capitalization of 'i'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct verb tenses would significantly improve the accuracy of the writing.

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