Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I am writing to you a concern related to my job description. I am working n this organization over past two years. I have gained different valuable experiences like problem-solving, communication skills and how to improve quality according to customer care.

In addition, these particular several significant qualities can play a crucial role in other department. I believe my abilities to quick adopt the new changings and quick understanding of any difficult task to complete within time is considerable.

However, I don't want to leave this company and give my remarkable efforts for my position. Therefore, I wish to transfer my department so that, I may utilize my qualities to betterment to new department and I believe it is also essensial for better team work.

I request you to please consider this and allow to my transfer operations department as well. look forward with joy

Yours faithfully,

peter

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state what you have learned, explain the benefits of your transfer to the company, and express your commitment to remaining with the organization. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how the company would benefit is quite general. To reach a higher band, you should provide more specific examples of how your skills would translate to the operations department. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though it could be more professional in certain sections.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'However', and 'Therefore' to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing and minor errors in sentence structure, which makes the progression feel slightly mechanical. The use of referencing is generally clear, but the transition between the second and third paragraphs could be smoother to better connect your desire to stay with your request for a transfer.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, including terms like 'valuable experiences', 'crucial role', and 'utilize'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'quick adopt the new changings' (should be 'quickly adapt to new changes') and 'betterment to new department'. Additionally, there is a spelling error ('essensial'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your intent, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I am writing to you a concern' (missing preposition), 'I am working n this organization over past two years' (missing article and incorrect preposition), and 'allow to my transfer' (incorrect verb structure). These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader, although they do not completely impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and the accurate formation of complex sentences.

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