Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr James,

I write this letter with regard to a possible promotion into a different department as I have successful worked and gain experience in the company for the past two years.

I believe the experience and exposure i acquired from my present job is topnotch. I learnt to become more effective, and productive towards a task assigned to my team and I. Also, I have known the principal success of a project is team work, and effective communication skills.

However, the new department which is the production department is challenging. I am sure the management will not regret their decisions. The company will benefit from my promotion in multiple ways because I can build up creative ideas, perform a task with minimal supervision, and help achieve positive goals for the establishment.

That being said, I would be grateful to remain with this establishment because I have gotten a lot of values since i became a member of the organisation. I have a boost in my self-confidence, CV boost, and overall well being.

Thank you for recommendations. I look forward to get a positive feedback.

Yours sincerely,

Rosemary Adibe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state what you have learned, suggest how the company would benefit from your move, and explain your desire to remain with the organization. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the explanation of how the company would benefit is a bit generic. To improve, try to provide more specific examples of how your current skills would translate into value for the production department. Overall, the task is fulfilled effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Also', 'However', and 'That being said' to link your ideas. While the progression of ideas is clear, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes a bit mechanical. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that the transition between your current experience and your future goals is more seamless. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different requirements of the task.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'exposure', 'productive', and 'establishment'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'successful worked' (should be 'successfully worked') and 'gotten a lot of values' (should be 'gained a lot of value'). Additionally, 'topnotch' is slightly informal for a professional letter. To improve, focus on using more precise professional collocations and ensure that your word forms are grammatically correct in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I have successful worked' (adverb needed), 'i acquired' (capitalization), and 'look forward to get' (should be 'look forward to getting'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To improve, pay closer attention to verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of gerunds after phrases like 'look forward to'. Proofreading for minor slips in capitalization and tense consistency will also help.

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