Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to you because I have been working in your facility from last two years and now I am thinking to shift to an another department instead of leaving this company as I think it is crucial to do a growth in my career.

The job I am currently working has taught me lot of things. I learned how to work in a team while working here. I have really improved my communication skills as compared to when I started. These skills have helped me and taken me so far in my career.

There is huge amount of advantages which I can provide to your organization by moving to another sector. Things I have learned from my current job positions will be very helpful. Also, I will be able to perform better there because I have gained enough knowledge which I need to be there.

As I mentioned earlier, I will be staying in your company. The reason behind this is that I have dreamed to watch this organization grow along with the growth of my career.

Kind regards,

Gurpreet Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state what you have learned, suggest benefits for the company, and explain your commitment to staying. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat generic. For instance, when discussing the benefits of moving departments, you mention 'things I have learned' without specifying what those skills are or how they would specifically apply to a new role. To reach a higher band, provide more concrete examples of your professional achievements and how they translate to the needs of a different department. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a manager.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each bullet point, and a closing. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate ideas. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Also' and 'As I mentioned earlier', to link sentences. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and the use of cohesive devices could be more varied to improve the natural progression of ideas. The referencing is generally clear, and the letter follows a standard formal structure, which makes the message easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic phrases like 'lot of things' and 'huge amount of advantages'. There are also some minor collocation issues, such as 'do a growth in my career' (should be 'achieve professional growth') and 'shift to an another department' (should be 'transfer to another department'). To improve, try to incorporate more professional, topic-specific vocabulary related to career development and workplace skills. The current range is sufficient to communicate your meaning, but it does not demonstrate the flexibility required for a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. For example, 'working in your facility from last two years' should be 'for the last two years', and 'The job I am currently working has taught me' should be 'The job I am currently doing has taught me'. Additionally, 'I have dreamed to watch this organization grow' is slightly unnatural; 'I am keen to contribute to this organization's growth' would be more accurate. These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to limit the score.

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