Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Boyana,

I am writing this letter to request regarding change my department from shipping area to production area as a machine operator in the Nafta foods company.

I joined this company in August 2024, as a shipper and i have learned so many valuable skills while working here such as problrm - solving, time management, multitasking, and Leadership skills which are utilitarian in order to become perfect match for any position.

If the company would move me from this area to production department then it would be win win situation for the company and me as well as i know ins and outs of this firm. Secondly, there should be no need of any documentations as i am already working here from long ago. finally, it would be saving money for the company as they would not need to hire a person for me to introduce about the production area as i already been there many times.

To be honest i do not want tom leave this company because while getting position as a machine operator i can apply for my residency here.

Hoping to hear from you positive response

Yours sinserely.

Hardeep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state what you have learned, explain the benefits of your transfer to the company, and provide a valid reason for wanting to stay. The tone is appropriate for a professional request. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the explanation regarding the 'win-win' situation could be more specific to show how your skills as a machine operator would directly add value to the production department. While the task is fully addressed, the depth of the arguments is slightly basic, which prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Secondly' and 'finally' to sequence your arguments. However, the transition between ideas is sometimes a bit mechanical, and the paragraphing is slightly inconsistent. For example, the final paragraph is very short and could have been integrated better. Additionally, the use of referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'they would not need to hire a person for me to introduce about the production area', which is slightly confusing in its structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'multitasking', 'utilitarian', and 'ins and outs'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'request regarding change my department' (should be 'request a change of department') and 'getting position' (should be 'obtaining a position'). There are also spelling errors like 'problrm' and 'sinserely'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precision in your word choice and better proofreading to ensure professional standards.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include missing articles ('in shipping area'), incorrect verb forms ('I have learned... as a shipper'), and punctuation errors. For example, 'I joined this company in August 2024, as a shipper and i have learned...' contains a run-on structure and capitalization errors. While the meaning remains clear, the frequent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent article usage would significantly improve your accuracy.

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