Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Manager,

I hope you are doing well. I would like to request you regarding the switching from one department to other. It’s been two years, I am working in same department. In current era, career progression is very much vital.

In present job, I had learned many different skills and also enhanced my practical knowledge. Although, at initial stage its look bit tough, but later on by your support and motivation it was a good start in this corporate sector. I have learned a lot of things here like problem handling, solving and solutions implementation.

Furthermore, switching department can be very beneficial for company. Moving from accounts to audit department will be a key plus point. In addition, I can navigate the incorrect transactions in a very less time. Further, I can also reconcile accounts work as I had previous experience in it. Our audit department can have more transparency and accuracy.

Therefore, I would like to continue my work in this prestigious company. As, I have in-depth knowledge of my department and now I would like to excel and gain a valuable experience in same company, but different department.

Thank you for your time and consideration, I look forward to hearing from you.

Best regards,

Shahrukh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state what you have learned, explain the benefits to the company of your transfer, and express your commitment to remaining with the organization. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager. However, some ideas could be developed further; for instance, the explanation of how you would navigate incorrect transactions is a bit vague. To reach a higher band, ensure that your arguments are fully supported with specific examples or clearer professional reasoning. Overall, the purpose of the letter is clear and the requirements are met.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure with clear paragraphing. You use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition', and 'Therefore' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing, such as the phrase 'in same company' which lacks an article. The progression of ideas is generally smooth, but the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking phrases to avoid repetitive sentence structures. The overall organization is sufficient to guide the reader through your request without confusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using professional terms like 'career progression', 'corporate sector', and 'reconcile'. There are some instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'request you regarding the switching' and 'in a very less time', which are not natural collocations. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. Focusing on more natural word combinations and avoiding repetitive use of basic verbs will help improve your lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I had learned' (should be 'I have learned'), 'at initial stage its look bit tough' (missing subject/verb agreement and articles), and 'in same company' (missing article). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. To improve, pay closer attention to verb tenses and the use of articles (a/an/the). Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help you move toward a higher band.

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