Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Manager,

I am writing to request a transfer to a different department within the company, as I believe it would be a significant step towards my career development.

I have been working in your company for the last two years in the same department. During this time, I have gained valuable skills, such as customer service, communication, teamwork as well as time management. I have also learned how to handle customer complaints professionally and provide appropriate solutions.

I believe moving to a different department would benefit the company's progress. I could use my existing skills to manage my new responsibilities and can work efficiently with other team members. It not only helps me in my career growth but also enhances the productivity of the company.

As I am working with this company for a last two years, I do not want to leave it. I am comfortable with its working environment and appreciate the opportunities that I received here. I would like to continue my developing my career within the organization.

I would be grateful if you could consider my request. I look forward to discussing this opportunity with you.

Yours sincerely,

Sandeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly outline the skills gained in your current role, explain the benefits of a transfer to the company, and provide a convincing reason for wanting to stay. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter, and the purpose is clear from the outset. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific examples of how your current skills (e.g., 'customer service') would directly translate to a specific department, rather than keeping the benefits somewhat general. Overall, the response is well-focused and meets all requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs addressing each prompt requirement, and a professional closing. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate distinct ideas. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'During this time', 'I have also', and 'As I am working', which help the flow of information. To improve, you could incorporate a wider range of cohesive devices to link sentences more fluidly, as some transitions feel slightly repetitive. However, the progression of ideas is easy to follow throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using professional terms like 'career development', 'transfer', 'responsibilities', and 'productivity'. The language is natural and appropriate for a formal request. There are no significant errors in word choice that impede meaning. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise or less common collocations. For example, instead of 'I am comfortable with its working environment', you could use 'I value the company's professional culture'. Your current vocabulary is sufficient and accurate, but lacks the sophistication required for the highest bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

The letter shows a good mix of simple and complex sentence structures. Most sentences are grammatically accurate, and punctuation is used correctly. There are a few minor slips, such as 'continue my developing my career' (should be 'continue developing my career') and 'for a last two years' (should be 'for the last two years'). These errors are infrequent and do not interfere with communication. To improve, ensure consistent use of articles and verb forms. Overall, your control of grammar is solid, and you demonstrate the ability to construct complex sentences effectively.

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