Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am working in a marketing department of your company since two years. Hence, I am writing to request you to change my place in IT department as it is essential to develop my career.

As a marketing director, I have gained more knowledge about advanced communication skill, basic advertisement production and editing skill and its importance in a marketing sector.

As I said this move is necessary for my future, it will be also beneficial for your company. This is because if I would get a position in IT department, I will be able to do both marketing as well as IT work at the same time which would save a time and labor of a company as marketing field always need a help of IT sector to finish their tasks. Moreover, I am just graduated from bachelor of IT which helps me to be more confident and advance in my work.

I really wish to continue my work with the same company because of my friendly collogues and better wage.

Hoping to hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Alex

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state your current experience, explain the benefits of the transfer to the company, and express your desire to remain with the firm. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how the company benefits from your move is a bit repetitive and could be more professional. Additionally, referring to yourself as a 'marketing director' while having only two years of experience is likely an exaggeration that undermines the realism of the task. To reach a higher band, ensure your ideas are more logically extended and grounded in a professional tone.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some basic cohesive devices such as 'Hence', 'Moreover', and 'This is because'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs feels a bit abrupt. The use of 'As I said' is slightly informal for a formal letter to a manager. To improve, try to use a wider range of linking words and ensure that the progression of ideas feels more natural and less like a list of requirements.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'career development', 'advanced communication skill', and 'beneficial'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'change my place in IT department' (should be 'transfer to the IT department') and 'save a time and labor of a company' (should be 'save the company time and labor'). There is also a spelling error ('collogues' instead of 'colleagues'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the flow. For example, 'I am working in a marketing department... since two years' should be 'I have been working... for two years'. There are also issues with article usage ('the IT department') and conditional structures ('if I would get' should be 'if I were to get' or 'if I get'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to limit your score in this criterion.

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