Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Prakash,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this to request an opportunity to transfer in different department within the company. I believe that that would be beneficial for my career development along with the organization.

Over the past two years of experience as a Software Test Engineer, I have had an great opportunity to understand basic fundamentals of IT and mainly I got a chance to learn and get hands on experience on coding. It was a great learning path for me to learn from the scratch.

I personally believe transferring to the development team would be the great chance for me to enhance my coding skills further which I have developed as a Test Engineer. As I am aware of all the operations and projects requirements, it would be quite easy for me to align myself in the development team as a Developer as compared to new candidate.

I respect that this company has invested on me for the last two years. I do not wish to leave this company because, I have been enjoying working here with team members the team work along with its culture.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours faithfully,

XYZ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state your experience as a Software Test Engineer, explain the benefits of your transfer to the development team, and provide a valid reason for wanting to stay within the company. The tone is appropriate for a formal request to a manager. To improve, you could provide more specific details regarding the 'coding skills' you have developed to make your argument more persuasive. Overall, the response is well-structured and fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a formal closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'Over the past two years' and 'As I am aware of', to link your ideas. However, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect sentences more fluidly. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the progression of ideas is logical throughout the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. Phrases like 'career development' and 'align myself' are used appropriately. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'an great opportunity' (should be 'a great opportunity') and 'transfer in different department' (should be 'transfer to a different department'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to professional development and organizational goals, and pay closer attention to article usage and prepositional phrases.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is generally effective. However, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'I believe that that would be' (unnecessary repetition) and 'invested on me' (should be 'invested in me'). Additionally, there is a minor punctuation error in the final paragraph regarding the comma placement before 'I have been enjoying'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and preposition usage will help improve your accuracy.

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