Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Marcus,

I am writing to explain my interest in the position for sue chef. Although, I am working in this restaurant since 2 years, I want to see myself growing in this company. While working with this company I learned how to serve best, team management and how crucial is team work in hospitality.

I think i can be a perfect fit for this position because i know all of my duties and responsibilities in addition I also help my team wherever they need me. I also gave training to new hiring so well.

I personally do not want to left this company as I can see my self in future to grow my career in this company. Moreover, this was my first job and I am so connected with this and want to see myself growing in this company.

I am happy to hear from you.

your sincerely

simranjeet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You mentioned your learning experiences, suggested how the company would benefit from your move, and explained your loyalty to the firm. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, when explaining how the company would benefit, you focus primarily on your own skills rather than explicitly detailing how a move to a different department would add value to the organization. To improve, try to provide more specific examples of how your current experience translates into value for a new department. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter to a manager, though it could be slightly more professional.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical structure with clear paragraphing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Moreover' and 'In addition' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel abrupt. For example, the jump between discussing your duties and mentioning training new hires could be smoother. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'in this company' throughout the text. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the progression of ideas feels more natural and less like a list of points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant industry-related terms like 'hospitality' and 'team management'. However, there are several inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'sue chef' (should be 'sous chef'), 'new hiring' (should be 'new hires'), and 'do not want to left' (should be 'do not want to leave'). These errors are noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your intent. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of professional titles and common verb-noun collocations to enhance your precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that affect the accuracy of your writing. Examples include tense issues ('I am working... since 2 years' should be 'I have been working... for 2 years'), subject-verb agreement, and incorrect verb forms ('I also gave training' should be 'I have also provided training'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on verb tenses and consistent sentence construction will significantly improve your accuracy.

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