Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear manager,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to express my interest in the marketing department in our office.

Although, I am working in the logistics department for the last five years; and I learned various skills, including communication, analytical, and team-work, I want to switch with the marketing sector. Moreover, leadership skills are also improved by me while working on different projects and presentations collaboratively.

Furthermore, I have also enrolled in the Business and Project management course in which I will come across several group activities to boost my confidence and develop management skills. Therefore, implementing those skills into our marketing stretegies would contribute to improve company's overall revenue.

Considering the values and opportunities company provided me, I do not wish to leave this company. Apart from it, working online while attending online classes will be beneficial for me to save money and travel time. I hope you would better understand and appreciate my decision.

Thank you for your support and cooperation.

Yours faithfully,

Tom

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state what you have learned in your current role, explain the benefits to the company of your move, and express your commitment to staying with the firm. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited; for instance, the connection between your new course and the marketing department's revenue could be more explicitly detailed to show a stronger grasp of the business impact. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the depth of explanation could be improved to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific requirement of the task. You use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Therefore' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the punctuation in the second paragraph (specifically the use of the semicolon and the comma after 'Although') is incorrect, which disrupts the flow of the argument. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the internal structure of the sentences needs more attention to ensure a smoother reading experience.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'analytical', 'collaboratively', and 'strategies'. There are some minor errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'stretegies' (spelling) and 'switch with' (collocation; 'switch to' would be more natural). You also use 'company provided me' which is missing a relative pronoun ('that the company provided'). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands. Expanding your range of professional collocations would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical inaccuracies that affect the clarity of your writing. For example, 'I am working... for the last five years' should be the present perfect continuous ('I have been working'). The phrase 'leadership skills are also improved by me' is passive and awkward; an active voice construction would be more natural. Additionally, there are punctuation errors, such as the unnecessary semicolon after 'five years'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to limit your score.

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