Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I am writing this letter to request you to give me the opportunity to work in different department as I already spend 3 years in this position. This role not only thought me coding and many software of IT field , but also assist me in my personal growth.

However, I would like to work in assistant manager as I did part time course of IT and also some fundamental key roles for this company. I would like to contribute my learning in particular way so I can help to increase the company’s growth. In addition to that I can assist my team meme in right way because I am familiar with company’s rules and regulations.

I have chance to work in other companies as I have a experience now, but I would love to help this company’s growth because its give me a plethora of things to settle my life and work balance.

Thank you so much for support and understanding. If you need any further details feel free to ask me.

Yours faithfully

Ritika Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You mentioned your learning in your current role, suggested how the company would benefit from your move, and explained your loyalty to the firm. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, when explaining the benefits to the company, you mention 'increase the company’s growth' and 'assist my team', but these points lack specific detail or professional depth. To improve, try to elaborate on how your specific IT skills would translate into value for the new department. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the structure could be more polished to better reflect a professional request.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your request. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'In addition to that', and 'Therefore' (implied). However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. Some transitions feel slightly abrupt, and the connection between your past experience and your future goals could be smoother. The use of referencing is generally clear, but there are instances where the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing, such as the transition into the third paragraph regarding your desire to stay with the company. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message, but there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors. For example, you wrote 'thought me coding' instead of 'taught me', and 'work in assistant manager' instead of 'work as an assistant manager'. Phrases like 'plethora of things to settle my life' are slightly unnatural in a formal business context. While you attempt to use more advanced vocabulary, the accuracy is inconsistent. To reach a higher band, focus on using collocations correctly and ensuring that your word choices are appropriate for a professional, formal letter to a manager.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'its give me'), article usage (e.g., 'in different department'), and tense consistency (e.g., 'I already spend 3 years'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. To improve, pay closer attention to basic sentence construction, particularly the use of articles and verb tenses. Proofreading for these common slips would significantly improve the clarity and professional quality of your writing.

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