Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- say what you have learned in your present job
- suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
- explain why you do not wish to leave the company
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear manager,
I hope this letter finds you well and good.
To be honest, I learnt a lot of things while working in this present job such as how to deal with costumers and how to deliver a presentation and many more skills.
As I am working right know as a employee from last two years . There was not changes in promotion as well as in salary so, i don't think so i am happy to it feel better to be to transfer in another department . it will also good for company .
first of all this was my first company given me a a lot . for my better future i want to update my lifestyles so i thought to shift in another department the main reason behind not to leave company is when to one was ready to take to me in company . so this company saw my talent given me a new life.
your sincerely,
navdeep singh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt: skills learned, benefits to the company, and reasons for staying. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited and at times unclear. For instance, the explanation of why the company would benefit from your transfer is vague, stating only that it would be 'good for company' without explaining how your skills would add value in a new role. Additionally, the tone is inconsistent; while it is a formal letter, the phrasing is often informal or confusing, such as the explanation regarding why you do not wish to leave the company. To improve, ensure each point is fully explained with clear, logical reasoning.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. The transition between discussing your current skills and your desire to move departments is abrupt. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often inaccurate or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'so' and the awkward phrasing 'first of all this was my first company'. The lack of clear linking words makes the relationship between sentences difficult to follow at times. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits the ability to convey professional intent. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'costumers' instead of 'customers', 'right know' instead of 'right now', and 'update my lifestyles'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex professional goals or gratitude effectively. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations related to business and career development, such as 'professional growth', 'transferable skills', or 'contribute to the team'. Spelling errors also occur, which detracts from the professional tone required for this task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('There was not changes'), tense usage ('I learnt a lot'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'the main reason behind not to leave company is when to one was ready to take to me in company'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing capital letters and incorrect comma usage. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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