Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Mr. Ali,

I am writing this letter to request your permission to apply for a new job vacancy in the Machine learning team in our company.

Throughout the last two years, I have been working as a software developer in the development team. During this period, a lot of experience was gained, including problem formulation, design architecture, and model pipelines. Additionally, my technical and leadership skills were also developed.

The new vacancy in the Artificial Intelligence (AI) team will be suitable for me, as I have completed my master's in AI systems, which has covered cutting-edge technologies. Therefore, I am confident that I can contribute positively to the company's growth with the new team.

Although a new challenge is chased, I have no desire to leave the company. I appreciate all the benefits, which are provided by the company, and I am satisfied with the working environment.

Thank you for considering my request.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Your sincerely,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly outline your experience in the development team, explain the benefits of your transfer to the AI team, and express your commitment to the company. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific examples of how your current skills in 'problem formulation' or 'model pipelines' would directly translate to the AI team's projects, which would further develop your ideas and demonstrate a more persuasive approach.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is well-organized with a clear logical progression. Each paragraph focuses on a specific requirement of the task, and the use of transition words such as 'Additionally', 'Therefore', and 'Although' helps guide the reader through your argument. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter. To improve, you could vary your cohesive devices slightly more, as some transitions feel a bit standard. Overall, the flow of information is smooth and easy to follow throughout the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary relevant to the technical field, such as 'model pipelines', 'design architecture', and 'cutting-edge technologies'. The word choice is generally precise and appropriate for a professional context. There are a few minor awkward phrasings, such as 'Although a new challenge is chased', which sounds slightly unnatural. Using more idiomatic or natural collocations would enhance the sophistication of your writing. Overall, the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly and effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures effectively. Most sentences are error-free, and your control over grammar is strong. There is a minor error in the closing: 'Your sincerely' should be 'Yours sincerely'. Additionally, the passive voice in 'a lot of experience was gained' is grammatically correct but slightly less engaging than an active construction. Despite these minor slips, your control over complex structures is consistent, and your punctuation is accurate throughout the letter.

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