Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Aftab,

In a 24/7 working factory, proactive steps are necessary to solve root causes of the problem. My current job title of working as a maintenance planner has greatly contributed to this. It gives me an exposure of planning and coordinating activities to ensure efficient production. Moreover, it gave me an immense satisfaction to keep my department operation-ready.

However, there is still a lot more, I could contribute to the company. I am holding a Master's degree in Industrial Engineering. Apart from Maintenance department, I understand working style of production department as well. Due to my experience, I know the functionality of machine properly and that could be the biggest asset to work as a Production Supervisor.

I wish to stay in this company because I have grown at a professional level. In addition to that, this organization helped me with the job when needed the most. I want to keep growing and move up the hierarchy.

Yours Faithfully,

Yash Mehta.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state what you have learned as a maintenance planner, suggest how the company would benefit from your move to the production department, and explain your loyalty to the firm. The tone is appropriate for a formal business letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat brief. For instance, while you mention your Master's degree, you could have elaborated more on how specific industrial engineering skills would translate into immediate value for the production team. Overall, the response is relevant and covers all requirements effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific requirement of the task. You use transition signals such as 'Moreover', 'However', and 'In addition to that' to guide the reader through your arguments. While the progression of ideas is generally clear, some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The use of referencing is generally accurate, though the connection between the first and second paragraphs could be smoother to better emphasize the transition from your current role to your desired future role. Overall, the structure is sound and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly, including terms like 'proactive', 'root causes', 'coordinating', and 'hierarchy'. There are some minor collocation issues, such as 'gives me an exposure of' (should be 'gives me exposure to') and 'keep my department operation-ready' (which is slightly awkward). While you attempt to use more sophisticated language, some word choices are slightly imprecise. However, the vocabulary is adequate for the task, and your meaning is never obscured by these minor inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'Due to my experience, I know the functionality of machine properly and that could be the biggest asset...'. There are some grammatical slips, such as 'I am holding a Master's degree' (present continuous is less natural here than 'I hold') and 'I understand working style of production department' (missing articles). Punctuation is generally correct, though there is an unnecessary comma after 'lot more'. Despite these errors, the grammar does not impede communication, and the sentence variety is sufficient for this task.

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