Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- say what you have learned in your present job
- suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
- explain why you do not wish to leave the company
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Manager,
I am writing to express my interest in moving a different department within the company. While holding the same position for two years, I acknowledged everything and now empowered to take more responsibilities for my career development.
As I am working in dispatch department, by which I have gain valuable experience in customer service, problem-solving and team collaboration. These attributes are prominent to address multifarious activities at the same time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Because the letter is incomplete, it fails to address the final bullet point regarding why you wish to stay at the company. The ideas presented are underdeveloped and the letter ends abruptly. To improve, you must ensure all three bullet points are covered in detail and that the response meets the length requirement to allow for full development of your ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is too short to demonstrate a clear logical progression or effective use of paragraphing. While there is a basic attempt at an opening, the lack of a body and conclusion makes it difficult to assess the overall structure. You should aim to use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your ideas more fluidly once you have expanded the content of your letter.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is somewhat limited and contains some awkward phrasing. For example, 'I acknowledged everything' is not a natural collocation in this context. While you attempt to use more formal language like 'multifarious' and 'prominent', these are not always used accurately. Focus on using vocabulary that fits the professional context of a formal letter and ensure that your word choices are natural and precise.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are several grammatical errors that impede clarity. For instance, 'moving a different department' should be 'moving to a different department', and 'by which I have gain' should be 'where I have gained'. The sentence structure is quite simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure you are using the correct verb tenses when describing past experience versus current career goals.
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