Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter for development in my carrier . I am working from two year in your company . I have learned lot of experience in company . In my present i learned how to communicate with other

If you moving me in different department . I am very hard worker and punctual . I have experience in company so i have good relationship with other employee . I increase profit in your company.

I have good friends in company so I have good relationship with her and the firm weather is very good . I feel secure and comfortable in firm . I am working like a family member in company . so I not wish to leave the firm .

Thank you for hearing me

Yours faithfully ,

Parminder Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development of ideas is limited and the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum. While you mention what you have learned and why you want to stay, the explanations are brief and lack the necessary detail to fully satisfy the task requirements. For example, stating 'I increase profit' is vague and lacks supporting evidence. To improve, you should expand on your specific skills and provide more concrete examples of how your transfer would benefit the company. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, but the lack of length prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical. Transitions between sentences are frequently missing or awkward, such as starting sentences with 'If you moving me' or 'I have good friends'. The logical flow is somewhat disjointed, making the progression of ideas feel repetitive. To improve, you should use a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') to connect your ideas more naturally and improve the overall readability of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying on simple structures like 'I have' and 'good'. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'firm weather' (likely meaning 'work environment') and 'carrier' (instead of 'career'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. To achieve a higher band, you need to move beyond basic vocabulary and incorporate more precise, topic-specific language related to professional development and business environments. Focusing on correct spelling and appropriate word choice will also help improve your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tense ('I am working from two year'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure ('If you moving me in different department'). Many sentences are simple and lack the complexity required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before periods and commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement. Practising the use of complex sentences will also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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