Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I would like to inform you that two years ago, i got hired as a chef for line cook at Hangar billiard. Now, i want to move to a another department in the same company.

As a chef, i learned alot of technique and skills in this industry which was beneficial for me. I handles many big orders like catering for 200 people as well as i managed to prepared many dishes like butter chicken and goat curry which got renowed in the restaurant as many peopled loved it.

Now, i want to move to the bar department. I quite had 3 years of experience doing bartending in my past work. Also, i can trained new workers at the bar. I saw a new opening of this position at company website. So, you can move me to that department.

I do not want to leave this company because i have really good relationship bond with my colleagues and all of them were very helpful.

I look forward to hear from you soon

Yours Faithfully,

XYZ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: describing your current learning, suggesting benefits for the company, and explaining your desire to stay. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention your experience as a chef, the explanation of how the company would benefit from your move to the bar is quite brief. To improve, try to elaborate on how your specific skills, such as your previous bartending experience, would add value to the new department. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though it could be more professional in certain sections.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use basic cohesive devices like 'also' and 'so' to link ideas. However, the progression between sentences can feel a bit mechanical, and some transitions are abrupt. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition to this') to create a smoother flow between your paragraphs. Additionally, ensure that your referencing is clear throughout the text to avoid any ambiguity.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message clearly, such as 'catering', 'department', and 'development'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and informal phrasing, such as 'got hired', 'learned alot', and 'relationship bond'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on using more formal collocations and avoiding colloquial expressions. Expanding your vocabulary to include more industry-specific or professional terminology would also help elevate your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'i handles', 'i can trained', 'all of them were very helpful'). Additionally, there are consistent issues with capitalization, such as the lowercase 'i' used throughout the text. While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to impact the overall accuracy of your writing. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical consistency will significantly improve your score.

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