Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing this letter regarding to pursue my career in IT department of our organization. Currently I am working in accounting branch were I learned skill management, accounting software and auditing as well as managing clients. However, I completed my degree in software engineering but working in accounting branch as a part-time employee.

Now, our company have job opening in IT branch so I want to move my position to the work related to my education.

Moreover, getting a job within a branch also benefits our authority as I already have great knowledge about the working system of our company. Apart from this, our organization holds better reputation in markets which is also a reason i do not want to resign as well as my pay package is also great.

I would really appreciate if you consider my application for a software engineer and provide me opportunity to prove myself. If you need any further information please feel free to contact me.

Yours Sincerely,

Gurwinder Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state what you learned in your current role, explain the benefits to the company of your transfer, and provide reasons for wanting to stay. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of how the company benefits from your move is brief and could be expanded with more specific examples of how your accounting background would add value to an IT role. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening sentence is slightly awkward and lacks clarity regarding the specific purpose of the request.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use some cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Moreover', and 'Apart from this' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the paragraphing could be improved by separating the introduction from the body paragraphs more clearly. Additionally, some referencing is slightly unclear, such as in the phrase 'getting a job within a branch', where it is not immediately obvious which branch you are referring to. Improving the variety of linking words would enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'organization', 'auditing', and 'opportunity'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'accounting branch' (instead of 'department'), 'skill management' (which is vague), and 'our authority' (which is misused in this context). While these errors do not prevent the message from being understood, they limit the precision of your writing. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and professional terminology appropriate for a workplace setting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'regarding to pursue' (incorrect preposition usage), 'were I learned' (should be 'where'), 'our company have' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'move my position to the work' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is generally functional, but some sentences are slightly disjointed. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to suggest a need for more careful proofreading and a better grasp of basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement.

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