Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Singh,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to request to shift from my current job position to another in the same company.

I have been working in your esteemed establishment for the last five years as a marketing manager. I have played this role very well and I know everything about it as after working such a long time at the same position I contained in-depth knowledge that how to handle different tasks in an effective way.

I have made a plan to move in different department as I want to expand my knowledge in different fields, which would be not only beneficial for me but also for the company. If I aware about other department tasks, I can perform that task in the absence of someone. In this way, there would be no effect on the production process.

I would not want to leave this company because along with friendly working environment, it provides many health and pension benefits to the employees. I enjoy by working there.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I hope my request would be consider at your earliest convenience.

Yours sincerely.

Soni.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: what has been learned, the benefits to the company, and the reasons for staying. The tone is appropriate for a formal request to a manager. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, the explanation of what you have learned is quite vague, stating only that you 'know everything' about the role. To reach a higher band, you should provide specific examples of skills or projects managed. The suggestion regarding company benefits is clear, but could be more persuasive by detailing specific departments or cross-functional synergies.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different requirements of the task. Cohesive devices are present, such as 'In this way' and 'along with', though some transitions feel slightly mechanical. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the connection between the desire to move departments and the specific benefits to the company could be smoother. Overall, the information is easy to follow and the purpose of the letter is clear from the start.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing for clear communication. There are some attempts at more formal language, such as 'esteemed establishment' and 'at your earliest convenience'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'contained in-depth knowledge' (should be 'gained' or 'possess') and 'move in different department' (should be 'move to a different department'). The range is sufficient to convey the intended meaning, but lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The letter uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist throughout the text. Examples include 'If I aware about' (should be 'If I am aware of'), 'perform that task' (should be 'perform those tasks'), and 'I enjoy by working there' (should be 'I enjoy working there'). Additionally, there is a minor punctuation error in the closing 'Yours sincerely.' which should be a comma. These errors do not impede communication but occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score.

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