Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear manager,

I am writing this letter to request you to please enroll me in front desk department.

Currently, I am working as a housekeeper in your hotel for last two years. Thus, I learned making beds, cleaning etcetera. Apart from this, I also learned team work, collaboration and coordination while working with other team members.

You will be delighted to know that I have completed my MBA. Therefore I am looking for something that relates to my field, and thus working in a housekeeping department is not my future goals. Moreover, the experience and knowledge I gained from this program will help the company to grow.

Being a responsible and dedicated worker, I want to continue with the same company. I also feel valued from the management, thus I have no plans to change the company.

I am hoping to hear from you.

Thank You

Yours Faithfully,

Hardeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully mention your current learning, explain the benefits of your transfer, and express your commitment to the company. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention your MBA, you could have elaborated more on how specific skills from your degree would translate into value for the front desk department. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though it could be slightly more professional in its request for a transfer. Overall, the task is addressed, but the content lacks the depth required for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Currently,' 'Apart from this,' and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, the flow between some sentences feels a bit mechanical. The transition between your current role and your academic qualifications is abrupt. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your paragraphing serves to clearly separate the different requirements of the task. The overall progression of ideas is clear, but the cohesion could be more sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'collaboration,' 'coordination,' and 'dedicated.' However, there is a reliance on simple, repetitive phrasing (e.g., 'I learned... I also learned'). There are also some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'enroll me in front desk department' (should be 'transfer me to the front desk department') and 'not my future goals' (should be 'not aligned with my career goals'). Expanding your range of professional collocations would help improve this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. For example, 'I am working... for last two years' should be 'I have been working... for the last two years.' Additionally, 'I also feel valued from the management' should be 'I also feel valued by the management.' These errors are frequent enough to be noticeable but do not prevent the reader from understanding your request. To reach a higher band, focus on consistent use of verb tenses and correct preposition usage.

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