Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- say what you have learned in your present job
- suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
- explain why you do not wish to leave the company
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Manager, I wrote this letter for inform that I am moving for new department. My latest job is of computer oprator which is very common job in upcoming era this job will be replaced by AI which is not good for me and our company. You will find a lot of computer operator jobless due to AI, nowdays computer oprator job is in endanger while AI oprator job will be in high demand. I have thought that to take a course of AI oprator which is available nowdays and seats are empty so it will be a very helpful thing for me and our company. Our company needs a AI oprator and probably I can handle this job. Afterall if I do this AI oprator course it will both helpful for me and our company I hope you must understand our situation
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to address the prompt effectively. While you mention your current role, you do not clearly explain what you have learned over the past two years. The suggestion regarding the company's benefit is vague and focuses more on your personal desire to learn AI rather than how the company would specifically gain from your transfer. Furthermore, the letter is under the 150-word minimum, which significantly impacts the development of your ideas. To improve, ensure you explicitly state your professional achievements and provide a more logical, business-oriented argument for your transfer that aligns with the company's goals.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks a formal structure. It is written as a single block of text rather than using appropriate paragraphing for a formal letter. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; sentences are often joined abruptly or lack logical transitions. For example, the jump from discussing AI to suggesting a course is sudden. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for the introduction, body, and conclusion, and employ linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to guide the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'job' and 'helpful'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'oprator' (operator) and 'nowdays' (nowadays), and awkward phrasing like 'in endanger'. The tone is not consistently professional or appropriate for a letter to a manager. To reach a higher band, you should expand your vocabulary to include more precise professional terminology and ensure you check your spelling carefully. Avoid informal phrasing and focus on using words that accurately describe your professional experience and career goals.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tense ('I wrote this letter for inform'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or run-on, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. For instance, 'I have thought that to take a course' is grammatically incorrect. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms will also help improve your accuracy.
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