Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 7.5)

Dear Mr Holland,

I am writing to formally request a transfer from my current role in customer service associate to a role within the digital marketing team. Over the past two years my time as a customer care associate was very rewarding. Working in this role allowed me to gain invaluable knowledge about our product ecosystem, customer pain point and frontline operations. Managing customers also honed my communication and problem solving skills.

While I have thoroughly enjoyed my position, I believe transferring to the digital marketing team will allow me to leverage the experience to bring success for the company in a broader scale. Interacting with the customer directly has allowed me to understand the preference and convenience of a customer very clearly. Joining the digital marketing team will give me the scope to use this understanding to advertise our product, which will improve the conversion rate and brand messaging accuracy.

I do not have any plan to leave the company as I deeply admire our corporate culture and strongly align with our long term vision. However to continue my professional development and to contribute to the growth of the company I feel this is the best next step that can be taken.

Thanks for considering my request. I would appreciate the opportunity to discuss this further at your convenience.

Yours Sincerely,

Meraz Prodhan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 8.0

The letter successfully addresses all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly outline the skills gained in your current role, such as 'product ecosystem' knowledge and 'problem-solving skills'. You also provide a logical argument for how the company would benefit from your transfer to digital marketing, specifically mentioning 'conversion rate' and 'brand messaging'. Finally, your commitment to the company is clearly stated through your admiration for the corporate culture. The tone is professional and appropriate for a formal business request. The ideas are well-developed and the purpose of the letter is clear from the opening paragraph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 8.0

The letter is well-organized with a clear logical progression. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. You use cohesive devices such as 'While I have thoroughly enjoyed', 'However', and 'To continue my professional development' to link your ideas effectively. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter, and the transition between your past experience and future goals is smooth. The overall structure is coherent, and the information is presented in a professional, easy-to-follow manner.

Lexical Resource — Band 7.0

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary appropriate for a professional context, using terms like 'invaluable knowledge', 'ecosystem', 'honed', and 'conversion rate'. There are a few minor collocation issues, such as 'in a broader scale' (should be 'on a broader scale') and 'customer pain point' (should be plural 'points'). However, these do not impede communication. You show an ability to use topic-specific language effectively, which elevates the quality of the writing. The vocabulary is sufficiently varied to convey your message with precision and professional tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.5

Your writing displays a good mix of simple and complex sentence structures. You use complex sentences effectively, such as 'Joining the digital marketing team will give me the scope to use this understanding to advertise our product, which will improve the conversion rate'. There are a few minor grammatical slips, such as 'my time as a customer care associate was' (tense inconsistency with 'I am writing') and 'do not have any plan' (should be 'plans'). Despite these minor errors, the majority of your sentences are error-free, and your control over punctuation and sentence structure is strong enough to maintain a high level of clarity throughout the letter.

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