Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Mr. sharma

I writing to tell you about the thing that i feel that now this is imperative to move to a different department in the same company.

In my current job i learned many things like now i am working as packaging the breads with this my speed of working is fast and more energetic while doing this work. Also, i get know about different people on the one roof from different cultures.

Moving to other department will be constructive for me as well as for my company . The primary reason is that if some one is not able to come i will do work in their department also i will learn more things about the company development areas.

The biggest reason of not leaving the company is that now i know every people of my company i have now my many friends there and very lovable bond with them . Also my pay rate is also very good here i get it in my job.

Yours sincerely,

Tanisha Gharu

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: skills learned, benefits to the company, and reasons for staying. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat superficial. For example, the explanation of how the company would benefit from your move is vague, focusing on 'learning more things' rather than specific professional contributions. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though it lacks the professional polish expected for a request to a manager. To improve, you should provide more concrete examples of your achievements and link your skills more explicitly to the needs of the new department.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Phrases like 'Also' and 'The biggest reason' are used repeatedly to start sentences, which makes the flow feel a bit repetitive. There is a lack of sophisticated linking words or transitions that would connect your ideas more fluidly. While the overall arrangement is logical, the progression between sentences could be smoother to achieve a higher band score. Ensure you vary your transition words to improve the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. You rely on simple descriptors like 'many things', 'fast', and 'good'. There is an attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, such as 'constructive' and 'imperative', but these are occasionally used in slightly unnatural ways. To improve, you should aim for more precise collocations and a wider range of professional vocabulary. For instance, instead of saying 'my speed of working is fast', you could use 'my efficiency has increased significantly'. Avoid informal phrasing like 'get know' and 'lovable bond'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include missing articles ('the company'), subject-verb agreement ('i know every people'), and awkward sentence structures ('I writing to tell you'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and spacing around punctuation marks. While you attempt some complex sentences, they often contain errors that distract the reader. To reach a higher band, focus on basic accuracy, such as correct verb tenses and consistent capitalization, before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for these small errors would significantly improve your score.

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