Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to express my interest for applying in department of a quality control. I am a full time employer of this company, I have been working since, last two years as a Welder. Through the period, I have gained huge experience which has been significantly enhancing my knowledge toward the works from team management, production control to operating machines.

As I have recently competed a part-time course of quality checker, I would provide number of advantages, including auditing of final products and raw material, accuracy checking, focus on making quality. For now, company is looking for this position, I am eligible for this position, with my training certificate.

Morever, I never want to leave this company as it is a reputed firm in a Waterloo Region, which is based under the Linamar Corporation. The team management is a great assest of this company, due to its supporting culture. Everyone tries to help their teammates while working. Additionally, It not only offers the best pay, employees can able to get annual allowances such as, medical benefits, eye and ear checkup, paid vaccations.

I hope you will accept my proposal for the promotion.

Yours Sincerely,

Supreet Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The response successfully covers all bullet points required by the task prompt. You state what you have learned in your present job as a Welder, including 'team management, production control to operating machines'. You suggest how the company would benefit by mentioning your recent completion of a 'quality checker' course and how you can assist with 'auditing of final products and raw material'. Furthermore, you explain why you do not wish to leave the company, highlighting the reputed nature of the firm, the supportive management culture, and attractive employee benefits. All parts of the task are appropriately addressed with clear, relevant ideas, earning a solid band score for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a clear overall structure, opening with a standard salutation and ending with a formal sign-off. Paragraphs are used to separate different points, such as your current role, your qualifications for the new department, and your reasons for staying. However, transitions and cohesion can sometimes feel mechanical or slightly awkward, as seen in phrases like 'Through the period' instead of 'During this period' and 'For now, company is looking for this position'. Referencing and cohesive devices are generally functional, allowing the reader to follow your progression of ideas easily, but lack the flexibility and sophistication required for higher band levels.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary has an adequate range for the task, allowing you to discuss your job duties, training, and company benefits effectively. You attempt less common items such as 'production control', 'auditing', and 'supportive culture'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors throughout the text. For instance, you wrote 'interest for applying in department of a quality control' instead of 'interest in applying for the quality control department', and 'employer' instead of 'employee'. Additionally, minor slips like 'vaccations' and 'assest' indicate spelling inaccuracies that prevent a higher score, though your meaning remains clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and conditional structures. However, your grammar contains several noticeable errors and awkward phrasing. Examples include 'I have been working since, last two years as a Welder' (misplaced comma and missing article) and 'employees can able to get' (incorrect modal verb combination). Punctuation is occasionally faulty, such as comma splices and unnecessary commas separating closely related clauses. While these errors do not impede overall communication, they occur frequently enough to restrict your score to a band 6.0 under the official descriptors.

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