Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I hope you are doing well, as you know that i am a bright employee of your company. I proved myself in my present job which is inbound department, i learned how this whole warehouse works whether it is a receving, or a shipping department.

However, now i want to let you know that i am very much familer with all the departments and the system too so, if possible can you change my department in term of my personal and professional growth. You already know that what is my caliber, i can do multitasking even it is on the floor or on the system.

I don't want to leave the company because this is the first job of my entire life, where i learend how to be honest with your work. After that i share good rapport with all my colleuges as a family. Lastly, i hope you will understand my point.

warm regard,

Jaspreet Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The candidate has successfully addressed all three bullet points required in the prompt. You mentioned what you have learned in your present job, specifically stating that you work in the inbound department and have learned how the warehouse functions regarding receiving and shipping. Furthermore, you suggested how the company would benefit from moving you, noting that your familiarity with systems and your capability for multitasking would be advantageous for personal and professional growth. Finally, you explained why you do not wish to leave the company, citing emotional attachment and loyalty as it is your first job. While the development of some ideas is slightly basic and relies on informal phrasing, all key content requirements are clearly met, justifying a solid band score for this criterion.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter exhibits a coherent overall arrangement with a clear, logical progression from explaining your current role and learnings to proposing a departmental shift, and concluding with reasons for staying. Paragraphing is used to separate distinct ideas, such as grouping the job details in the first paragraph, the request and benefits in the second, and the reasons for remaining in the third. However, cohesive devices are sometimes faulty or mechanical, as seen in the run-on sentences and punctuation issues like 'system too so, if possible'. Referencing is generally clear, but the flow is occasionally disrupted by missing conjunctions and comma splices.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, though it tends to be quite basic and contains noticeable spelling and word choice errors. Words such as 'receving' (receiving), 'familer' (familiar), 'colleuges' (colleagues), and 'learend' (learned) indicate recurring spelling slips. While the candidate attempts less common expressions like 'good rapport' and 'personal and professional growth', inaccurate word forms and spelling errors limit the score. Nevertheless, communication is not impeded, and the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended message effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writing displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are several run-on sentences and comma splices, such as 'as you know that i am a bright employee' and 'you already know that what is my caliber, i can do multitasking'. Capitalisation errors are also present, such as lowercase 'i'. While complex structures are attempted, they often contain structural awkwardness or punctuation flaws. However, meaning remains clear despite these frequent errors, aligning well with the characteristics of a band 5.5 performance.

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