Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Manager,

I hope you are doing well. The purpose of this email is to move to a different department for career growth in our company.

I have been working as a Supervisor about 2 years, since i started working here. I have never had a chance to move myself to a different department. I learned several skills from my current job like project management, communication, and time management skill. I am still enjoying my position although,I want to move to Human Resource department for my career development. I think i can grow myself and polish my skill in HR department. This encourges me a lot to learn more skills. Moreover, i can bring all skills for new role which learnt from my present position. Therefore, i kindly request you to consider my application.

In addition, i like to work in our company and it gives me positive enviornmnet and good working culture. So i never think to leave the company.

Thank you

Maulik

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The candidate has successfully addressed all three bullet points required in the task instructions. First, the writer mentions what has been learned in the present job, such as project management, communication, and time management skills. Second, the response suggests how the company would benefit by stating that the employee can bring all these accumulated skills to a new role. Third, it clearly explains the wish to stay within the company due to the positive environment and good working culture. The tone is appropriate for a semi-formal workplace letter, and the purpose is clear throughout. Although the ideas could be slightly more extended to reach a higher band, all parts are covered well and relevantly, meeting the criteria for a solid performance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter maintains a clear overall arrangement and follows a logical progression from stating the purpose of the email to detailing past learning, future intentions, and reasons for staying. However, the paragraphing is somewhat weak, as the entire body of the letter is bundled into a single block of text rather than being separated into distinct paragraphs for each point. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'In addition', but there are occasional mechanical transitions or minor referencing issues. Overall, the organization is sufficient to guide the reader through the message without significant confusion.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms like 'career development', 'project management', and 'application'. There are some attempts at less common vocabulary, though accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice or phrasing, such as 'move myself to a different department' instead of 'transfer to' and 'polish my skill' rather than 'enhance my skills'. Spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'enviornmnet', are present but do not impede communication. The vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the intended message effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as using subordinate clauses introduced by 'although' and 'because'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors and punctuation issues throughout the text, including lowercase 'i' pronouns ('i think', 'i can'), missing articles (e.g., 'to Human Resource department'), and minor punctuation flaws like missing spaces after commas. Despite these errors, the sentences remain largely understandable and do not impede the overall communication of the message. The control of grammar is typical of a mid-level band.

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