Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to infrom you that i am working in sales department for last two years. Althorugh, I feel it is vital for my career development to move to a accounts department in the same company.

Fristly, I learned to many things in present job. I ubgrade my skills. such as, communication skill, team management and how to work in critical a stutations.

Secoundly, the company have to many benefits. I peform my best for companies gowth. I know hoe to lead a team and I have one year expersain in account field.

Finally, the reason is why I do not leave the company. because of team work collgue are help in every stutation and all are give recpect to each others.company are growing to fast.

I would be gratefull if you could give me a chance for work in account department. thank you for your understanding and cooperation. Ilook forward to your prompt response.

Your Faithfully,

Patel Uvesh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You successfully mention what you have learned in your present job, suggest how the company would benefit from your transfer, and explain why you do not wish to leave the company. However, the development of these ideas is rather basic and limited. For instance, the points about company benefits and your reasons for staying are quite brief and lack deeper elaboration. Although the letter format is attempted, the overall depth corresponds to a Band 5.0 level of task completion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, with transition signals such as 'Fristly', 'Secoundly', and 'Finally' used to structure the response. However, the logical progression is hindered by frequent structural and mechanical issues. The paragraphing is slightly disrupted by very short, fragmented sentences, and referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the dangling phrase in the fourth paragraph ('the reason is why I do not leave the company. because of...'). Cohesive devices are attempted but are often inaccurate or mechanically applied, placing this aspect firmly at a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, reflecting a limited range appropriate for simple communicative needs. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'infrom' for inform, 'Althorugh', 'ubgrade' for upgraded, 'stutations', 'gowth', 'expersain', 'collgue', and 'recpect'. Some attempts are made to use less common items like 'career development' and 'cooperation', but the persistent lexical errors and lack of precision restrict the score to Band 4.5, which rounds to 5.0 in standard reporting, though here evaluated as a solid 4.5/5.0 boundary. Let us award 4.5 based on the density of spelling errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain severe grammatical errors. Examples include 'i am working in sales department for last two years' (missing articles and tense issues), 'learned to many things', and 'all are give recpect to each others'. Punctuation is also problematic, with incorrect full stops splitting dependent clauses. The frequency of basic grammatical errors impedes readability at times, indicating a Band 4.5 to 5.0 level of control.

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