Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- say what you have learned in your present job
- suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
- explain why you do not wish to leave the company
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 4.0)
dear sir
hope you are fine sir i wanted to ask is there is any job their in the company because i am not going to leave this job i am shifting from tronto to tasmania i want to know if there is any shift their this job is very much importanat fpor me and for my family i want you to please shift my job from this company to another department of this country this job is my all life it is important for my career my life. i am just one in my family i have no dad no any brother and no any sister just my mother my wife and my kids i want you to shift my job from this department to tasmania department me and my famikly will thank to you and i promise that i will do hardwork their i promise to you,tghank you for understanding sir
your employee
arshika bajaj
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response only partially addresses the requirements of the prompt. While the student mentions a desire to change departments for career development, the core content deviates significantly into personal and family hardships, such as stating 'i have no dad no any brother and no any sister just my mother my wife and my kids'. Furthermore, the letter confuses a department transfer within the same company with a geographic relocation to Tasmania, stating 'i want you to please shift my job from this company to another department of this country' and mentioning moving from Toronto to Tasmania. Because the specific bullet points regarding what was learned in the present job and how the company would benefit are not clearly and appropriately developed, the task is awarded a band score of 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organisation of the text is quite weak, lacking proper paragraphing, punctuation, and a logical structure for a professional letter. The response is written as a single continuous block of text with run-on sentences connected by conjunctions or commas, such as 'this job is my all life it is important for my career my life. i am just one in my family...'. Cohesive devices are virtually absent or inaccurate, making the flow disjointed and difficult to follow. Referencing is also unclear, as pronouns and transitions do not clearly link ideas together. Given these issues with overall progression and cohesion, the response falls into band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and limited, relying heavily on everyday words like 'job', 'company', 'family', and 'life'. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'tronto' for Toronto, 'tasmania', 'importanat' for important, 'fpor' for for, 'famikly', 'tghank' for thank, and 'hardwork'. These errors and the narrow lexical range strain the reader and reflect a vocabulary profile consistent with a band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structure of the writing is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple clauses strung together without correct punctuation or capitalization. There is a complete lack of complex sentence forms, and major punctuation errors are pervasive, such as missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and improper comma splices ('i wanted to ask is there is any job their in the company because i am not going to leave this job...'). Frequent errors in tense, preposition usage, and sentence boundaries cause constant difficulty for the reader, leading to a band score of 4.0.
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