Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- say what you have learned in your present job
- suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
- explain why you do not wish to leave the company
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Manager, I am writing to express my experience regarding my job as a teacher is very good in your school.I started my teaching job at your school since last two years and now I feel it is important to improve my career in the different department. Moreover,it will be more benefical for your school or company to move in a different department because now I have much experience in coodinating,examination,managment,art and craft activities which perform with students.that y I asking for moving someother department.personaly I do not want to leave the school because I like it and i spent long period ,have unfourgetable memories those are near to my heart.secondly the enviorment of this school always appealing me motivatied me so that cant'n leave this job . I hope you understand my feeling about this job and concern for moving to another department.I will be waiting for your positive response sooner. Yours faithfully, Maham Ali
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the bullet points required by the task prompt. You successfully mention what has been learned in your present job ('experience in coodinating, examination, managment, art and craft activities'), suggest how the company would benefit from moving you ('it will be more benefical for your school or company...'), and explain why you do not wish to leave ('personaly I do not want to leave the school because I like it'). However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and basic. The letter achieves the purpose and adopts an appropriate semi-formal tone to a manager, fitting the band 6 descriptor profile quite well.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The letter demonstrates a basic overall arrangement, but paragraphing is poorly handled, resulting in massive blocks of text rather than distinct paragraphs for each bullet point and purpose. Cohesive devices are attempted ('Moreover', 'secondly'), but referencing and punctuation around them are sometimes faulty or mechanical. For example, sentences run together without proper spacing or full stops (e.g., 'activities which perform with students.that y I asking...'). This disrupts the logical flow and places the response firmly at band 5.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
Your vocabulary range is adequate to convey simple ideas, including words like 'coordinating', 'examination', and 'unfourgetable memories'. However, there are noticeable spelling errors ('benefical', 'coodinating', 'managment', 'enviorment', 'unfourgetable', 'motivatied') and lexical inaccuracies ('experience regarding my job... is very good', 'appealing me'). These errors occasionally cause slight difficulty for the reader. While you attempt some less common vocabulary, the frequent spelling and word-choice errors restrict the score to band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'I started my teaching job at your school since last two years and now I feel it is important...' However, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as tense misuse ('since last two years' instead of 'for the last two years'), missing punctuation, run-on sentences, and awkward phrasing ('that y I asking for moving someother department'). These errors are frequent, though they rarely impede overall communication entirely, aligning with a band 5.0 performance.
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