Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my feeling to move different department in your company as I am working in same department since last two years. Because of this, I learn a lot of things from my current job.

Firstly, I would like to thank you for giving chance to work in this department. I was fresher when I started this job, and I also nervous about my new job. Apart from it, I learn how to make figma, website and so many business'app, which really help me to increase my knowledge. Therefore, I learned many things from this department.

Furthermore, now i want to work with senior groups who present this company. Why you should move to a different department as you know my learning ability is very high and I want to learn new techniques, which will be suitable for our department' growth.

In addition to it, why do not like to leave this company because this company provides me first job which i really like and my childhood dream was also complete to work here.

I would like to appreciate it if you could transfer me in a different department. I promise you i work hard there to achieve sucess.

Thank you for your time and consideration,

Kind regards,

Jass.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The candidate has addressed all parts of the prompt, though the development of some ideas is limited and slightly disjointed. The letter states what was learned in the present job, such as making Figma, websites, and business apps. It suggests how the company would benefit by mentioning the candidate's high learning ability and desire to learn new techniques that will be suitable for departmental growth. It also explains the wish to stay by highlighting that this is the first job and a childhood dream. While all bullet points are covered, the tone is occasionally inconsistent and some points are awkwardly expressed, placing this response at Band 6.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter features a basic logical organization with standard paragraph breaks used to address different parts of the task. Cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'In addition to it' are utilized to connect ideas, although some transitions feel somewhat mechanical. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in the third paragraph where pronouns and sentence structures become confusing, leading to a slight disruption in logical progression. Overall, the arrangement is coherent enough to earn a Band 6.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and industry terms like 'Figma' and 'business'app'. However, there are noticeable word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'express my feeling to move different department', 'giving chance', and 'achieve sucess' (spelling error). While these lexical inaccuracies and spelling slips occur, they do not impede communication, matching the descriptors for Band 5.5 to 6.0. A score of 5.5 reflects the frequency of these errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The candidate attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing articles ('working in same department', 'giving chance'), preposition errors ('move different department'), and tense inconsistencies ('I learn a lot of things', 'i want to work with senior groups who present this company'). Furthermore, capitalization of the pronoun 'i' is missing in several instances. Because these errors occur regularly and cause some minor difficulty for the reader, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.

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