Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Roberts,

I am writing this to express my interest in working for a different department.

Currently, I am working as a Lead hand in this food company. Doing this job, taught me real life skills such as organizing teams, handling the worker's issue, and communication skill.

Previous, when I applied for this job I was on student permit but as now I am on work pemit so I want to go in 'QualityDepartment.' I have done my study in Biotechnology, that is why I am considering my suitable for the quality assurance position. On other hand, I can take actual practical knowledge from this department.

One of the significant reason for not leaving this company is that I am comfortable with ever staff and I know them how they friendly in nature. All are cooperative and I have flexible work hours. Therefore, I do not want to apply in any other comapny.

I hope you will take me into consideration. I will be waiting for your response.

Yours sincerely,

Anju Pal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter covers all three bullet points successfully and maintains an appropriate semi-formal tone. You mention what you have learned in your present job as a Lead Hand, including organizing teams and communication skills. You suggest how the company would benefit by explaining your Biotechnology background and how it suits the Quality Department, while also noting that you will gain practical knowledge. Additionally, you explain why you do not wish to leave the company, citing a comfortable environment and flexible work hours. The purpose of the letter is clear throughout, and the ideas are relevant, though some points could be expanded slightly for greater depth. Overall, the requirements of General Training Task 1 are well met.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each addressing a different aspect of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Currently', 'Previous', 'On other hand', and 'Therefore' to link your ideas. However, referencing is sometimes imprecise, and certain cohesive devices are awkward or unidiomatic, such as 'Previous' instead of 'Previously' and 'On other hand' instead of 'On the other hand'. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to structure the letter from the opening statement to the final sign-off, providing an overall coherent arrangement despite minor mechanical flaws in cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The lexical range is adequate for completing the task. You attempt some less common vocabulary related to the workplace and your studies, such as 'Biotechnology', 'quality assurance position', and 'cooperative'. However, there are several word choice and collocation errors, such as 'worker's issue' instead of 'workers' issues', 'work pemit' instead of 'work permit', and 'ever staff' instead of 'every staff member' or 'all the staff'. Spelling errors like 'comapny' also occur. These errors do not impede communication, but they limit your lexical score to a Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as conditional or participial structures ('Doing this job, taught me...' and '...as now I am on work pemit so I want to...'). There are, however, noticeable grammatical errors and awkward punctuation. For example, 'Doing this job, taught me' contains an unnecessary comma, and 'I know them how they friendly in nature' contains a structural error. Furthermore, tense usage is sometimes inconsistent. While the errors are frequent enough to prevent a higher band, they rarely impede the overall meaning of your letter.

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