Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
- say what you have learned in your present job
- suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
- explain why you do not wish to leave the company
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ....................................,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Manager,
Sir i am writing a letter regarding to move me the different department. As you know i am working in this company form last two years. I came here as a fresher after my I.com studies and you teach me lotes of thing about software develpment i had learned almost two codeing languages which is larawall and world press and you know i have created lots of websites for our company i am very thankful to you all credite goes to you.
Sir now i just want to learn some more updated skill for our company as you know we have another department of social media marketing after learning this skill i am able to advatise our company product on all social media platforms
Sir i am earning good amount form this company and it is my duty to give you good perfomance so that is why i do not want to leave this company
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, successfully covering what has been learned in the present job, suggesting a benefit to the company, and explaining why the writer does not wish to leave. However, the development of these ideas is uneven. While the mention of learning 'larawall' and 'world press' (Laravel and WordPress) touches upon the first bullet point, the explanation regarding the social media department is rather limited and under-developed. The tone is appropriate for a workplace letter, and the purpose of the communication is clear throughout, meeting the requirements for a satisfactory task performance where some points are explored with more depth than others.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The letter presents a coherent overall arrangement and follows a logical sequence from past learning to future contributions and loyalty to the firm. Paragraphing is attempted, though the layout lacks traditional formal letter spacing and flows into dense blocks of text. Cohesive devices are somewhat basic and mechanical, relying heavily on conversational connectors like 'Sir' and repetitive sentence openings rather than a smooth range of transitional phrases. Referencing is generally clear, but the lack of punctuation makes the overall structural progression feel somewhat rushed and breathless.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited but minimally adequate to convey the basic message. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'form' instead of 'from', 'lotes' instead of 'lots', 'develpment' instead of 'development', 'codeing' instead of 'coding', 'credite' instead of 'credit', and 'advatise' instead of 'advertise'. These inaccuracies require the reader to occasionally interpret the intended meaning, reflecting a restricted control over word forms and spelling at this level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing displays a limited range of sentence structures, relying largely on simple sentences strung together with coordinating conjunctions or comma splices, such as 'you teach me lotes of thing... and you know i have created...'. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation—specifically the complete absence of periods or capitalisation in places. For instance, 'i am working in this company form last two years' misuse the present continuous with a past time marker. These errors cause some difficulty and strain for the reader, though the core meaning can still be deciphered.
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