Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

 

You started in your present job two years ago. You now feel it is important for your career development to move to a different department in the same company.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• say what you have learned in your present job
• suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department
• explain why you do not wish to leave the company

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ....................................,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to request that you move me to a different department in the company for my career development.

I am very thrilled that I have completed my 2 years in the same department with your support. I learned many things from this department such as coordination, analytics and how to build a good relationship with my colleagues.

I would like to move to a different department because I am good at programming such as C++, Java and Python.In addition, I think I can perform better in the programming language which would benefit both the company and my career development.

I would appreciate it if you could help me in changing the department at your earliest convenience because I would not like to change the company because I have developed strong relationships with my colleagues and enjoy working for the company.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours Sincerely,

Nitika

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all requirements of the prompt. You clearly mention what has been learned in your present job, such as coordination and analytics, and explain why you do not wish to leave the company due to strong colleague relationships. You also suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a programming-focused department. However, some ideas are more fully developed than others; for instance, the explanation of how the company benefits is somewhat brief and could be extended further to fully explore your potential impact. The tone is appropriately formal for a workplace letter, and the purpose is clear from the outset, placing this response securely within the target range for task fulfillment.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with a logical progression of ideas. Each bullet point from the prompt is addressed in a separate, logical paragraph, which helps guide the reader smoothly through your points. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately, starting with an opening statement of purpose and concluding with a polite sign-off. Cohesive devices are generally well managed, though referencing and transitions between sentences are sometimes a bit mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'because' in the final paragraph. To reach higher bands, you could employ a wider variety of cohesive links and more sophisticated referencing to connect your thoughts seamlessly.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for the task, successfully attempting less common items related to the workplace and technical skills, such as 'career development', 'coordination', and specific programming languages like 'C++, Java and Python'. There are some minor limitations and word choice inaccuracies, such as saying 'help me in changing the department' rather than 'assisting me with a departmental transfer', but these do not impede communication. Spelling and word forms are generally accurate. To achieve a higher score, you should incorporate more precise, less common lexical items and natural collocations characteristic of professional correspondence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

The writing displays a satisfactory mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating control over your structures. You successfully use subordinate clauses, as seen in 'I would appreciate it if you could help me...' and 'I am very thrilled that I have completed...'. There are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'perform better in the programming language' where 'languages' or 'roles' would be more accurate, and a missing space after a period before 'In addition'. However, these errors are infrequent and rarely impede communication. Your verbs, tenses, and punctuation are generally well controlled, reflecting a solid grasp of grammar.

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